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As the resident interrogater, it is my job to make sure you get certain facts right. So you better get the Ballet correctly.
Now if you do choose a ballerina on the cover, make sure it is a classic well known pose. Think Music box dancer. |
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Gregg, I want to put this gently, but once you lose a reader because of the anachronisms, you'll never get that reader back. Can you really afford to alienate readers who are disposed to be interested in your books, until they read one? Do you have such a large potential audience? Your beta reader is hostile? That tells me all I need to know. This was someone who was predisposed to be helpful at a minimum. And to have a reaction of hostility to me implies that s/he felt his time was wasted and that the book can't be fixed. Your reaction is to get rid of the reader, when my feeling is that you should shelve the book. Again, there isn't an infinite pool of people who are going to be willing to give your books a try. Could you chalk this up to a learning experience, maybe cannibalize the bits that work into another novel with a setting that you know? |
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Hey Gregg,
Let me tell you a little secret about readers. We do care about the little details. Now I will admit I know nothing about London. I also know very little about the Royal Ballet. What I do know is you will have many dancers that pick up your book so you dang well better have the pertinent facts right or the reader will think "who is this idiot" Oh wait really doesn't matter who this idiot is because you will be put on many "do not bother with this author again" lists. Not to mention at least one or two will write a review. True story: there was a new author. His first couple of books were very good. He made the automatic buy and read list. (No I am not talking about Russell. He is still on my favorites list.) So anyway this author gets a lot of support from some readers. Well now, we get to his 6th or 7th book and it was a piece of crap. (Note, that is putting it nicely.) In the first third of the book, he screwed up several little details. Not to mention the info dumps and repeats from previous books. Then he just made readers sick and got the physical stuff totally wrong. He got some bad reviews from previous readers and also lost several. He also will not be on a recommended list again. It was so bad if I hadn't got it the first day on sale, I would have wanted my money back. Oh you may have noticed I said first third. That is where I quit reading. So anyway, don't alienate your readers unless you are independently wealthy. |
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There are two kinds, really; those who say, "I need a man and a scepter and a dragon and a sabertooth tiger and a crown and a cave and a bat and, oh, yeah, did I mention he needs a magical staff?" Those are what I call the IMAX clients. They think of a book cover as the size of an IMAX screen, and they "see" the entire story scrolling across it. Wrong, wrong, and did I say, wrong? The second type are the "it doesn't matter" type. Now, I tend to struggle with that bunch (in my head, I mean) because they simply don't "get" that as much as they want to believe it, the writing isn't the "ONLY" thing that matters. That's what I believed, too, when I first got into this racket--that the covers didn't matter, only the story or the book mattered. And I was absolutely, positively, 180-degrees DEAD WRONG. I was horrified when I realized that bad covers could kill fabulous books, and great covers could sell mediocre books. But it's true. People ARE like crows, and they pick up bright shiny pretty things. So...don't do MURKY covers, unless there's a compelling reason...nope, I take that back. Don't do murky covers, period. If the bloody story is set in a swamp, find something colorful about it to put on the cover. Covers are absolutely critical. Particularly for an author still finding his or her audience, and astronomically so for a new author. Wanna be found? Need great cover, period. Now, the other discussion: details, readers, beta-reader hostility, etc. I'm one of "those." I'm one of those that will a) ignore small mistakes, like putting a given cafe on the wrong street, if the rest of the book is good enough to carry me along. But, I hate continuity errors, and if I feel that the author has taken his reader for granted, in not doing adequate research to support the tale, then I too will become outright hostile (particularly if I've paid bloody money, or worse, if it's a beta, not alpha, read, and my TIME has been taken for granted.) True story: before Booknook.biz really came to be, when I was still sorta working here, there (with the real estate crash having killed my "real" career) and the next place, one of my to-be conversion clients asked me to EDIT, not proofread, his mystery. He's a wealthy fellow, who hired a ghostwriter/co-author, to help him write a 7-book series of mysteries. The first book wasn't bad, in terms of plot. I felt that the characters, however, were positively DREADFUL. They could not have been more cardboard. I spoke to the client, and he told me some things that knocked me on my ass. 1. He doesn't READ. at all, for entertainment. ( ![]() I was fairly speechless about all of it. I told him the truth--the plot for the first book was a good one, but the characters were flat and cartoonish, and the female characters were outright offensively crafted. (He had a female character that was thrown out of the "Bolshoi" because her BREASTS WERE TOO BIG. I only recalled this because of your book, but...needless to say, that was one of the nails in his coffin, as far as my editing work for him went. I was like, "really?") He blithely ignored me, and off we went into the next books, which progressively became worse and worse. This guy spent a FORTUNE on the co-author, video trailers, his website, publicity... but he refused to listen to a word I said (or anyone else, mind you) about how poorly written the books were. These "mysteries" didn't have any (mysteries); they were more like thrillers. There was no "detective;" no clues. No detecting. I finally quit working for the guy, because I couldn't take it any longer. What did me in was this gem: he'd "poisoned" one of the characters, during a trip up a mountain. Several things were wrong. First, he Litvinenko'ed the guy. All well and good. But the victim died in MINUTES, not days/weeks. Secondly, although it took the characters hours to get UP the mountain, coming DOWN was accomplished in practically minutes, even though they were now CARRYING the dying/dead man. When I explained to the author that Polonium-210 takes days/weeks to kill someone, he said "oh, okay, well XXX has fixed it." (XXX being the co-author). And he did--he made it "magical." Basically, they wrote one line saying that one of the badguys "made it 100x more powerful." It was ridiculous, and pathetic. (n.b.: he also had another book in the series, about how terrorists took a gold mine hostage, holding the "world to ransom over the gold standard." When I said, "uh, we haven't been on the gold standard in decades," he blew me off, saying "it's only a story.") THAT is what will kill off a reader. I was positively insulted by all of it. He didn't know what a mystery WAS, even though he was claiming to have written and published 7 of them, in this series; he had no concern whatsoever for the intelligence of the reader; he thought magically making something "more" poisonous was an adequate solution to the problem of the Polonium; he blatantly disregarded time issues; the list goes on. This is a long-winded way of saying, if the Royal Ballet is crucial to the storyline, as is the UK locale, make SURE that you've researched both enough to not insult the reader. I, too, worry a bit when you say that your beta reader was "hostile" to the story. If that hostility is about either your locale, the ballet, or how a person in the UK speaks, then I would strongly recommend that you take a step back. Maybe you should shelve it for 3-6 months, and come back at it fresh. That, or ask people in ballet, and in the UK, to read the damn thing, before you publish it. When your reader makes a comment about the rhythm of a Londoner's speech, perhaps he means, in a roundabout way, that the dialogue isn't working for him/her. And it's true that someone in the UK doesn't sound like someone in London, CT, USA. There are different speech patterns, different slang, etc. I'm not hazarding a guess as to whether or not the book is good or bad or..? I'm just giving you examples of what can really make a reader lose interest, or get angry. Fantasy is one thing; but a thriller or mystery needs to have some roots in factual aspects, to be believable, even if it's about some whackjob who is going to blow up the entire world. The supporting "stuff" has to be there. One Polonium mistake, or one timeline error, can yank a reader completely out of the story. <snipped because I used it earlier, duh.> FWIW. Hitch Last edited by Hitch; 11-03-2015 at 12:56 AM. Reason: Sorry--meant to cut/paste that last paragraph. Was finishing this up when the phone rang. That'll teach me! |
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Thanks Issy, Cin and Hitch. That is all just fantastic advice and feedback. Guys, I am a reader too. I know what it's like to be blown out of a story by implausibility or inauthentic or inconsistent or inaccurate writing. I watch carefully for these things so as to not lose my reader.
It seems the word "hostile" was perhaps ill chosen. (Being prone to hyperbole as I am.) The beta reader provided really significant help and was not suggesting I shelve the book. When the book was first written I used The London Ballet as the place my MC was trying to get in as a dancer. That was a bad choice I was told. Not lofty enough. And hence the Royal Ballet. And she made several great suggestions. And the Royal Ballet is a very small aspect of the book. This is not a book about ballet. It's about an unreliable, possibly delusional, narrator who thinks she could be a prima ballerina. The Royal Ballet and the process of auditioning there hardly figure into the story. |
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You think it hardly figures because you are not a dancer. It would be a major idea to any dancer. It doesn't matter if it is one paragraph, one chapter or half the book, get that detail right or risk readers. And yes the title alone will attract dancers and ballerinas. |
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If I picked up a book titled American Ballerina, I would expect a book with fairly significant content related to ballet.
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