User Poetry - Page 43

WT Sharpe · 05-20-2010, 01:02 PM

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Originally Posted by GeoffC

A Matrix form .... as before, to be read down and / or across ...

[Maybe one for Pshrynk to analyse .....

]

copyright 20 May 2010

Nice! Did you ever drive a hack?

GeoffC · 05-20-2010, 01:12 PM

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Originally Posted by WT Sharpe

Nice! Did you ever drive a hack?

Now I have to wonder .... Hack ...... ?

WT Sharpe · 05-20-2010, 01:29 PM

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Originally Posted by GeoffC

Now I have to wonder .... Hack ...... ?

A slang term for a taxi.

GeoffC · 05-20-2010, 01:56 PM

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Originally Posted by WT Sharpe

A slang term for a taxi.

hah ... one of the many ..

no I haven't ....

WT Sharpe · 05-20-2010, 02:19 PM

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Originally Posted by GeoffC

hah ... one of the many ..

no I haven't ....

I did for a while after I got out of the Army. It was an experience!

I asked because of that line in your poem.

badgoodDeb · 05-21-2010, 06:34 PM

In the poem, he's referring to driving kids all over the place -- being their own cheap taxi!

I'm coming to the "ME" stage of life too. Liked this poem!

GeoffC · 05-22-2010, 01:42 AM

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Originally Posted by badgoodDeb

In the poem, he's referring to driving kids all over the place -- being their own cheap taxi!

I'm coming to the "ME" stage of life too. Liked this poem!

I was careful not to write me/he/son etc in this, in order to make it work for anyone .....

kennyc · 05-22-2010, 05:43 PM

Just revised this one a bit today.

Winter Thief

That night she stole the moon
and hid it beneath her skirts.
As she looked up her eyes pierced mine.
She flashed that seductive smile
and vanished into the cold dark wind.

Kenny A. Chaffin – 2/10/06

WT Sharpe · 05-22-2010, 06:48 PM

Quote:

Originally Posted by kennyc

Just revised this one a bit today.

Winter Thief

That night she stole the moon
and hid it beneath her skirts.
As she looked up her eyes pierced mine.
She flashed that seductive smile
and vanished into the cold dark wind.

Kenny A. Chaffin – 2/10/06

Nice work, Kenny!

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GeoffC · 05-23-2010, 01:40 AM

Winter Thief

thought - provoking.

one wonders, who she is ?

Benzjammin5 · 05-23-2010, 03:34 AM

Something I came up with it. I didn't know how to format it so i apologize. Please comment.

The Invisible Ghost

Every since I was a little kid no one has ever paid attention to me.

My drunken parent’s barely acknowledged me and my siblings acted as if I was a stranger to them.

I thought at school I would at least find some friends who would give their time to me but even the nerds ignored my existence.

Maybe the teachers and councilors at school would help me and care for me? But no, they too treated me as if I was invisible, not even asking me how I felt or anything that they were paid to ask.

Finally I had had enough and one night while my parents were passed out on the couch I snuck into my dad’s sock drawer.

I took out his colt and headed to my closet. Holding the gun to my head I debated over whether I should live or die.

Finally knowing that I no longer wanted to live I pulled the trigger, but to only discover that I was already dead.

kennyc · 05-23-2010, 06:52 AM

Quote:

Originally Posted by GeoffC

Winter Thief

thought - provoking.

one wonders, who she is ?

Yes, one does.

BTW I change one word....."pierced eyes" is a bad cliche that slipped in...

Here's the revision:

Winter Thief

That night she stole the moon
and hid it beneath her skirts.
As she looked up her eyes took mine.
She flashed that seductive smile
and vanished into the cold dark wind.

Kenny A. Chaffin – 2/10/06

kennyc · 05-23-2010, 06:57 AM

Quote:

Originally Posted by Benzjammin5

Something I came up with it. I didn't know how to format it so i apologize. Please comment.

The Invisible Ghost

Every since I was a little kid no one has ever paid attention to me.

My drunken parent’s barley acknowledged me and my siblings acted as if I was a stranger to them.

I thought at school I would at least find some friends who would give their time to me but even the nerds ignored my existence.

Maybe the teachers and councilors at school would help me and care for me? But no, they too treated me as if I was invisible, not even asking me how I felt or anything that they were paid to ask.

Finally I had had enough and one night while my parents were passed out on the couch I snuck into my dad’s sock drawer.

I took out his colt and headed to my closet. Holding the gun to my head I debated over whether I should live or die.

Finally knowing that I no longer wanted to live I pulled the trigger, but to only discover that I was already dead.

Nice job Benzjammin5. I love poems with a twist at the end!

One typo: barley - barely....

kennyc · 05-23-2010, 06:57 AM

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Originally Posted by WT Sharpe

Nice work, Kenny!

:

Thanks Tom. Hi Norton!

GeoffC · 05-23-2010, 07:18 AM

Quote:

Originally Posted by kennyc

Nice job Benzjammin5. I love poems with a twist at the end!

One typo: barley - barely....

I thought that, too -

It could be that barley may equate to wine or whisky !

05-23-2010, 03:34 AM	#641
Benzjammin5 Junior Member Posts: 3 Karma: 10 Join Date: May 2010 Device: none	Short Poem Something I came up with it. I didn't know how to format it so i apologize. Please comment. The Invisible Ghost Every since I was a little kid no one has ever paid attention to me. My drunken parent’s barely acknowledged me and my siblings acted as if I was a stranger to them. I thought at school I would at least find some friends who would give their time to me but even the nerds ignored my existence. Maybe the teachers and councilors at school would help me and care for me? But no, they too treated me as if I was invisible, not even asking me how I felt or anything that they were paid to ask. Finally I had had enough and one night while my parents were passed out on the couch I snuck into my dad’s sock drawer. I took out his colt and headed to my closet. Holding the gun to my head I debated over whether I should live or die. Finally knowing that I no longer wanted to live I pulled the trigger, but to only discover that I was already dead. Last edited by Benzjammin5; 05-24-2010 at 12:25 AM.

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05-21-2010, 06:34 PM	#636
badgoodDeb Grand Sorcerer Posts: 8,553 Karma: 64462893 Join Date: Jan 2008 Location: Harrisburg outskirts Device: Palms, K1-4s, iPads, iPhones, KV, KO1	In the poem, he's referring to driving kids all over the place -- being their own cheap taxi! I'm coming to the "ME" stage of life too. Liked this poem!

05-22-2010, 05:43 PM	#638
kennyc The Dank Side of the Moon Posts: 35,916 Karma: 119230421 Join Date: Sep 2009 Location: Denver, CO Device: Kindle2; Kindle Fire	Just revised this one a bit today. *Winter Thief* That night she stole the moon and hid it beneath her skirts. As she looked up her eyes pierced mine. She flashed that seductive smile and vanished into the cold dark wind. Kenny A. Chaffin – 2/10/06

05-23-2010, 01:40 AM	#640
GeoffC Chocolate Grasshopper ... Posts: 27,599 Karma: 20821184 Join Date: Mar 2008 Location: Scotland Device: Muse HD , Cybook Gen3 , Pocketbook 302 (Black) , Nexus 10: wife has PW	Winter Thief thought - provoking. one wonders, who she is ?