Book cover feedback?

[Gregg Bell]

Thanks to GrannyGrump. This has "One" again (instead of "A") and I've removed "a novel."

[Gregg Bell]

Word was the cover wasn't humorous enough so I did three new ones. Actually, two are re-dos. Any funnier?

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[theducks]

(Ex-Navy here. Not even close to ever being a Seal )

The tandem parachutists (2 covers) is SO WRONG (a civilian recreational thing)
A Seal would probably being dropped in with GEAR all over their person.

Those 2 covers JAR.
Oops ??

Maybe: 'Whose bright idea was this'

[Hitch]

Originally Posted by theducks

(Ex-Navy here. Not even close to ever being a Seal )

The tandem parachutists (2 covers) is SO WRONG (a civilian recreational thing)
A Seal would probably being dropped in with GEAR all over their person.

Those 2 covers JAR.
Oops ??

Maybe: 'Whose bright idea was this'

Yes, I couldn't help but notice that, too. It's a cute piece of clipart, no doubt, but...maybe if you put a seal-type figure/silhouette--an obvious combat-ready parachutists, and the two morons in their tandem rig, near him (or on a collision course with him?), that might work. But it's noticeably wrong, as is, if you're using the Seals or any SpecOps folks.

Hitch

[Gregg Bell]

Originally Posted by theducks

(Ex-Navy here. Not even close to ever being a Seal )

The tandem parachutists (2 covers) is SO WRONG (a civilian recreational thing)
A Seal would probably being dropped in with GEAR all over their person.

Those 2 covers JAR.
Oops ??

Maybe: 'Whose bright idea was this'

Thanks ducks. I hear you about the dual jumpers. And the Oops-A-Navy is a pun for Oops-A-Daisy.

[Gregg Bell]

Originally Posted by Hitch

Yes, I couldn't help but notice that, too. It's a cute piece of clipart, no doubt, but...maybe if you put a seal-type figure/silhouette--an obvious combat-ready parachutists, and the two morons in their tandem rig, near him (or on a collision course with him?), that might work. But it's noticeably wrong, as is, if you're using the Seals or any SpecOps folks.

Hitch

Thanks Hitch. I'm actually leaning toward using the Oops-A-Navy one. Friends are telling me nobody's going to be looking for a humorous novel called RESCUE or NAVY SEAL RESCUE. They just sound non-fiction.

[Hitch]

Originally Posted by Gregg Bell

Thanks Hitch. I'm actually leaning toward using the Oops-A-Navy one. Friends are telling me nobody's going to be looking for a humorous novel called RESCUE or NAVY SEAL RESCUE. They just sound non-fiction.

Yes, I don't disagree that the naming is not working, as it was originally proposed. (Still not submitting to CoverCritics, eh?).

Hitch

[issybird]

Originally Posted by issybird

I'm going to take the opportunity to ask if you can come up with a more alluring title? Not only is there a displeasing redundancy between the title and the series' name, it also strikes me as awfully pedestrian in itself. Ho-hum.

Originally Posted by Gregg Bell

Thanks issybird, but I'm committed to the title.

Originally Posted by Gregg Bell

I'm actually leaning toward using the Oops-A-Navy one. Friends are telling me nobody's going to be looking for a humorous novel called RESCUE or NAVY SEAL RESCUE. They just sound non-fiction.

Well, alrighty then. So much for commitment.

[Gregg Bell]

Originally Posted by Hitch

Yes, I don't disagree that the naming is not working, as it was originally proposed. (Still not submitting to CoverCritics, eh?).

Hitch

So, you don't like "Oops-A-Navy" as a title? And I have to narrow things down before I submit to CoverCritics or could I submit all three?

[Gregg Bell]

Originally Posted by issybird

Well, alrighty then. So much for commitment.

Mea culpa.

[Hitch]

Originally Posted by Gregg Bell

So, you don't like "Oops-A-Navy" as a title? And I have to narrow things down before I submit to CoverCritics or could I submit all three?

No, my comment was, "as originally proposed," by which I meant, Navy Seal Rescue. The new one is fine, if you're going for screwball comedy.

You can submit it as is, as far as I know, and I don't think that Nathan's ever eschewed multi-cover submissions, but what's the worst that can happen? He says no?

Hitch