Suspense thriller cover feedback?

[gmw]

Originally Posted by Gregg Bell

Okay. I love this tagline but I don't know if it works with the cover. What do you guys think? (I like this cover. Yes, it'll rely heavily on the title but I'm of the 'less is more' school of thinking. And it shows up cleanly as a thumbnail--which will be most of the looks it gets.)

And, ducks, this is a suspense thriller. Not some slow-moving suspense thing. (I'm okay with 'action.') Thanks.

I think it actually improves the cover. I see it as that "minimalist something" that Dr Drib was talking about - but a better option than an image that might seem out of place against the sunlight (unless very skilfully done).

I do think this plainer version needs something, and the tag-line seems a good fit to my eyes.

Maybe the tag line should be just a little bit lower? ... Not sure.

[Dr. Drib]

Originally Posted by Gregg Bell

Okay. I love this tagline but I don't know if it works with the cover. What do you guys think? (I like this cover. Yes, it'll rely heavily on the title but I'm of the 'less is more' school of thinking. And it shows up cleanly as a thumbnail--which will be most of the looks it gets.)

And, ducks, this is a suspense thriller. Not some slow-moving suspense thing. (I'm okay with 'action.') Thanks.

I'm sorry, but for me it just doesn't work: Too many words. I still think a small graphic of some sort is needed, rather than "When waking up is a nightmare."

I like those words, however, so I'm somewhat conflicted. OK: Maybe if they weren't in just a straight line. Think Hitchcock on the typography.

[JSWolf]

Originally Posted by gmw

You're making to too hard, we Aussies know how it's done. No need to focus to try and read the word.

Can't trust Aussies on beer. Remember. Aussie make Fosters.

[gmw]

Originally Posted by JSWolf

Can't trust Aussies on beer. Remember. Aussie make Fosters.

Yeah, but they don't drink it.

[ZodWallop]

Originally Posted by Dr. Drib

Maybe if they weren't in just a straight line. Think Hitchcock on the typography.

I agree. I'm fine with the tagline. But it should probably be placed lower on the cover and maybe with a different style font?

And how about an ellipsis at the end? Is that too overplayed? "When waking up is a nightmare..."

[theducks]

Originally Posted by gmw

You're making to too hard, we Aussies know how it's done. No need to focus to try and read the word.

You guys just start by making it Bigger... Lots Bigger. I have never seen a US 'regular' sized Fosters

[theducks]

Originally Posted by Dr. Drib

I like those words, however, so I'm somewhat conflicted. OK: Maybe if they weren't in just a straight line. Think Hitchcock on the typography.

Fabulous idea.
Something out of the ordinary. If the bed was there, the tagline could follow the skirt angle

[JSWolf]

Originally Posted by gmw

Yeah, but they don't drink it.

But they do call Foster Aussie's national beer.

[Gregg Bell]

Originally Posted by gmw

I think it actually improves the cover. I see it as that "minimalist something" that Dr Drib was talking about - but a better option than an image that might seem out of place against the sunlight (unless very skilfully done).

I do think this plainer version needs something, and the tag-line seems a good fit to my eyes.

Maybe the tag line should be just a little bit lower? ... Not sure.

I think you're right, gmw. It needed something. The spatial feng shu wasn't cool. I think I found it. I'll post the new one.

[Gregg Bell]

Originally Posted by Dr. Drib

I'm sorry, but for me it just doesn't work: Too many words. I still think a small graphic of some sort is needed, rather than "When waking up is a nightmare."

I like those words, however, so I'm somewhat conflicted. OK: Maybe if they weren't in just a straight line. Think Hitchcock on the typography.

I shifted the tag line and made the title text bigger. The cover isn't lonesome anymore. I'm going to post it.

[Gregg Bell]

The latest.

[Cinisajoy]

Originally Posted by Gregg Bell

The latest.

That would catch my eye.
I kind of like it.
Still way bright but in a good way.

[Dr. Drib]

Originally Posted by Gregg Bell

The latest.

Now I like it. For me, the balance is correct.

[theducks]

Yup!
Much Better

[gmw]

Originally Posted by Gregg Bell

The latest.

Did you try having the sun lower? (It's always hard to guess the effect without playing.) One of the things I liked about the previous version was the way the title text (and face) rose up from the sun (to put it dramatically: like she was screaming up out of the sun). In this new version I don't really like the way the sun sort of splits her face into two parts.

P.S. Otherwise I'm liking it.