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			Title: Haiku By The Numbers 
		
	
		
		
		
		
		
		
		
		
		
		
		
			--------------------------------- I can count to five And I can count to seven I can write Haiku (Copyright © 2016 Kevin A. Lyons) Last edited by cromag; 08-18-2016 at 03:58 AM. Reason: Added the title, etc.  | 
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			The fact that it's a poem containing 17 syllables is not, in itself, sufficient to form a haiku, cromag (and, indeed, most modern Japanese haiku no longer have 17 syllables). The key definition of a haiku is the juxtaposition of two different ideas with a "cutting word" between them. I would suggest, therefore, that your composition, although it has undoubtedly has great artistic merit, is not a haiku.
		 
		
	
		
		
		
		
		
		
		
		
		
		
	
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			Excellent. A proper haiku! Even has the desirable seasonal reference  
		
	
		
		
		
		
		
		
		
		
		
		
	
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			Reading many words. 
		
	
		
		
		
		
		
		
		
		
		
		
		
			But is this stuff poetry? Sometimes I wonder. Last edited by HarryT; 08-19-2016 at 02:02 PM.  | 
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			My august efforts 
		
	
		
		
		
		
		
		
		
		
		
		
	
	Have failed, like seeds sown in snow -- My words don't Haiku.  
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			Words on a page. 
		
	
		
		
		
		
		
		
		
		
		
		
	
	Seventeen syllables? Yes. But not a haiku.  | 
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			Sixteen.  
		
	
		
		
		
		
		
		
		
		
		
		
	
	 
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	When Someone gets Sick You worry they may die and they do. Kenny A. Chaffin – 8/24/2016  | 
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			3 x 3  
		
	
		
		
		
		
		
		
		
		
		
		
	
	 
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			The Morning After 
		
	
		
		
		
		
		
		
		
		
		
		
	
	America is at a Crossroads we are a Gathering of fools we have given the reins of power to a madman. Kenny A. Chaffin – 11/9/2016  | 
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