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WT Sharpe · 10-29-2010, 12:55 PM

Quote:

Originally Posted by kennyc

Judgment

With stone silence
around us
we wait.

Kenny A. Chaffin – 10/29/2010

Very very nice.

Quote:

Originally Posted by kennyc

Thanks Geoff.. appreciate that ..very unsure about this one....

In fact....a possible re-write:

Judgment

Surrounded
by stone cold silence
we wait.

Kenny A. Chaffin – 10/29/2010

I like the first form much better. "Stone cold" reminds me of the wrassler (deliberate spelling).

kennyc · 10-29-2010, 12:57 PM

Quote:

Originally Posted by WT Sharpe

Very very nice.

I like the first form much better. "Stone cold" reminds me of the wrassler (deliberate spelling).

eeeK!

Didn't think of that...I keep waffling back and forth....I'm leaning towards the first/original.

Thanks!

GeoffC · 10-29-2010, 12:59 PM

Sneaky edit that man ... !

The first evokes the imagery of someone, perhaps, within or close to an ancient stone circle; whilst the second could be sited within icy wastes such as the Himalayas.

Good example of how a change of structure can transform the meaning.

kennyc · 10-29-2010, 01:02 PM

Hmmmm......

GeoffC · 10-29-2010, 01:04 PM

stop teasing us !

etch them both into life!

badgoodDeb · 10-29-2010, 02:09 PM

Both versions make me think of a cemetery (the stone) ... in which case the judgement awaited would be the Final Judgement.

kennyc · 10-29-2010, 02:11 PM

Thanks Deb!

Joebill · 10-30-2010, 09:10 PM

poem: I remember The Long Ago...

I remember in the long ago,
watching the very first,
Captain Kangaroo show.

Ernie Kovacs was funny and thoughful.

I remember the first landings,
on the Earth's Moon,
my first most excellent hamburger,
watching 4 hours of cartoons,
at the movie theater for the princely sum,
of 25 cents.

Of being paid 50 cents a sack,
walking beside me mother,
as we both gleaned snap beans,
in a field and under a hot fall sun,
so we could have a bit of money,
I was 3 years old,
and being told recently,
I never worked a hard day in my life.

I just smiled and told them they were wrong,
and ignoring them further,
went back to work.

I remember the first time,
long ago when someone demanded,
twenty-five cents a week,
as protection money, in other words,
he wouldn't beat me up.

And I laughed in his face,
evidently a new sensation for him,
being laughed at.

I never paid, and he went to jail,
when he beat up a friend,
so as to intimidate me.

I remember the words from Long Ago,
'God Speed John Glenn !'

And the first steps,
a giant one for Mankind,
upon our Moon.

I remember Long Ago,
standing in my grandparent's backyard,
and looking up at the Night Sky,
seeing my first shooting star,
and the glow from the Milky Way !

I remember the 8 inch Dobsonian Reflector,
I purchased years ago and my first personal look,
at the mountains and craters of our Moon,
with my own eyes,
and not just a photo in a book.

Or the first time I got lost on a camping trip,
we had wandered around, about 6 of us,
it was a new area we had never camped in before.

When someone asked, 'Were is camp ?",
and the panic that ensued.

But I remembered what we had been taught,
I sat down, and collected my thoughts,
I declared "We are not lost !"

The rest looked at me like I had lost my senses.

"We are not on the Moon, nor Mars, or Venus,
We are in the central time zone, In Texas,
we have to be in the same county,
there hasn't been enough time for us to have wandered too far.

Listen !"

We heard highway sounds, dimly.

Well, there was a highway to the north,
and a minor county road to the east.

We knew we were on the south side,
of a small river.

I pointed all that out,
and we were back in camp,
less than 30 minutes later.

Oh, I remember Long Ago,
when the 25 cent candy bar disappeared,
and comics no longer cost 10 cents,
and movies cost the astounding price,
of sixty-five cents.

Seems cheap these days.

Ah well, Time Marches On,
but I remember the Long Ago,
and Far Away.

[ exit ]

GeoffC · 10-31-2010, 06:43 AM

A wonderful tale

WT Sharpe · 10-31-2010, 11:45 AM

Quote:

Originally Posted by Joebill

poem: I remember The Long Ago...

I remember in the long ago,
watching the very first,
Captain Kangaroo show.

Ernie Kovacs was funny and thoughful.

I remember the first landings,
on the Earth's Moon,
my first most excellent hamburger,
watching 4 hours of cartoons,
at the movie theater for the princely sum,
of 25 cents.

Of being paid 50 cents a sack,
walking beside me mother,
as we both gleaned snap beans,
in a field and under a hot fall sun,
so we could have a bit of money,
I was 3 years old,
and being told recently,
I never worked a hard day in my life.

I just smiled and told them they were wrong,
and ignoring them further,
went back to work.

I remember the first time,
long ago when someone demanded,
twenty-five cents a week,
as protection money, in other words,
he wouldn't beat me up.

And I laughed in his face,
evidently a new sensation for him,
being laughed at.

I never paid, and he went to jail,
when he beat up a friend,
so as to intimidate me.

I remember the words from Long Ago,
'God Speed John Glenn !'

And the first steps,
a giant one for Mankind,
upon our Moon.

I remember Long Ago,
standing in my grandparent's backyard,
and looking up at the Night Sky,
seeing my first shooting star,
and the glow from the Milky Way !

I remember the 8 inch Dobsonian Reflector,
I purchased years ago and my first personal look,
at the mountains and craters of our Moon,
with my own eyes,
and not just a photo in a book.

Or the first time I got lost on a camping trip,
we had wandered around, about 6 of us,
it was a new area we had never camped in before.

When someone asked, 'Were is camp ?",
and the panic that ensued.

But I remembered what we had been taught,
I sat down, and collected my thoughts,
I declared "We are not lost !"

The rest looked at me like I had lost my senses.

"We are not on the Moon, nor Mars, or Venus,
We are in the central time zone, In Texas,
we have to be in the same county,
there hasn't been enough time for us to have wandered too far.

Listen !"

We heard highway sounds, dimly.

Well, there was a highway to the north,
and a minor county road to the east.

We knew we were on the south side,
of a small river.

I pointed all that out,
and we were back in camp,
less than 30 minutes later.

Oh, I remember Long Ago,
when the 25 cent candy bar disappeared,
and comics no longer cost 10 cents,
and movies cost the astounding price,
of sixty-five cents.

Seems cheap these days.

Ah well, Time Marches On,
but I remember the Long Ago,
and Far Away.

[ exit ]

What a nice trip down memory lane! I remember watching double features for the kid's price of a quarter. We'd always go to the State theater because that's where they showed all the really quality films. You know the movies I'm talking about; the ones with space monsters, mad scientists, werewolves, and lizards big enough to smash entire cities!

And those 10¢ comics had three complete stories in each issue!

kennyc · 10-31-2010, 11:46 AM

Quote:

Originally Posted by GeoffC

A wonderful tale

Quote:

Originally Posted by WT Sharpe

What a nice trip down memory lane! I remember watching double features for the kid's price of a quarter. We'd always go to the State theater because that's where they showed all the quality films. You know the movies I'm talking about; the ones with space monsters, mad scientists, werewolves, and lizards big enough to smash entire cities!

Joebill · 10-31-2010, 04:27 PM

I remember one that Frank Zappa mentions in his song 'Cheapnis'.

Jet fighters, tanks, and ships firing deck guns, cannot harm the monster.

The Hero and his Girlfriend are walking alone on an isolated beach.

The Monster, an inverted ice cream cone of gigantic proportions with large teeth along the edge, comes out of the cave with its teeth dragging along the ground.

They run, The Girlfriend falls and twists her ankle.

The Hero gets out his pistol and shoots at The Monster.

The monster slowly backs away.

In some colpies if you look to the lower left of the screen you will see that the monster is on a skid made of wood and a hand is pushing it out of the cave.

According to Frank Zappa, "They must have pushed it out too far, as you can see a hand reach out from off frame and pull the monster back towards the cave."

GeoffC · 11-02-2010, 04:27 AM

In the deepest dark of night
come out the crawlies
they creep about.
wee things wee things and even weirder things
creep the floorboard cracks and fill 'em full of goo
hog the pile lay their eggs and 'posit things that glue.
long legs
short legs
hairy legs
galore.
In the deepest dark of night
come out the crawlies
creeping out
from cracks galore
from crannies and the nooks
even running away from spooks.
If the scary things are scared
lover-love run and hide.
Bedclothes beneath
you hide
shiver
terror in your eyes.
In the deepest dark of night
come out the crawlies
crawling about
under
over
through
between
they slither and slide
stroll and bide a-while
watching
multi-eyed
feelers a-quiver.
In the deepest dark of night
come out the crawlies
see them
hear them
f - e - e - l them.

In the deepest dark of night
shadows shudder
within your mind
the more you worry
the more they come
the more you worry
worry more you will....

kennyc · 11-02-2010, 06:35 AM

kennyc · 11-02-2010, 08:31 AM

Election Day

and now the pendulum
swings -
the winners lose
and the losers win

We’ll spend
the next six months
aligning and jockeying
and start all over again

Kenny A. Chaffin – 11/2/2010

10-30-2010, 09:10 PM	#893
Joebill Fanatic Posts: 517 Karma: 459442 Join Date: Jan 2010 Location: Alpha Centauri's Library of Alexandria Device: Pandigital Novel	poem: I remember The Long Ago... I remember in the long ago, watching the very first, Captain Kangaroo show. Ernie Kovacs was funny and thoughful. I remember the first landings, on the Earth's Moon, my first most excellent hamburger, watching 4 hours of cartoons, at the movie theater for the princely sum, of 25 cents. Of being paid 50 cents a sack, walking beside me mother, as we both gleaned snap beans, in a field and under a hot fall sun, so we could have a bit of money, I was 3 years old, and being told recently, I never worked a hard day in my life. I just smiled and told them they were wrong, and ignoring them further, went back to work. I remember the first time, long ago when someone demanded, twenty-five cents a week, as protection money, in other words, he wouldn't beat me up. And I laughed in his face, evidently a new sensation for him, being laughed at. I never paid, and he went to jail, when he beat up a friend, so as to intimidate me. I remember the words from Long Ago, 'God Speed John Glenn !' And the first steps, a giant one for Mankind, upon our Moon. I remember Long Ago, standing in my grandparent's backyard, and looking up at the Night Sky, seeing my first shooting star, and the glow from the Milky Way ! I remember the 8 inch Dobsonian Reflector, I purchased years ago and my first personal look, at the mountains and craters of our Moon, with my own eyes, and not just a photo in a book. Or the first time I got lost on a camping trip, we had wandered around, about 6 of us, it was a new area we had never camped in before. When someone asked, 'Were is camp ?", and the panic that ensued. But I remembered what we had been taught, I sat down, and collected my thoughts, I declared "We are not lost !" The rest looked at me like I had lost my senses. "We are not on the Moon, nor Mars, or Venus, We are in the central time zone, In Texas, we have to be in the same county, there hasn't been enough time for us to have wandered too far. Listen !" We heard highway sounds, dimly. Well, there was a highway to the north, and a minor county road to the east. We knew we were on the south side, of a small river. I pointed all that out, and we were back in camp, less than 30 minutes later. Oh, I remember Long Ago, when the 25 cent candy bar disappeared, and comics no longer cost 10 cents, and movies cost the astounding price, of sixty-five cents. Seems cheap these days. Ah well, Time Marches On, but I remember the Long Ago, and Far Away. [ exit ] Last edited by Joebill; 10-30-2010 at 09:14 PM. Reason: typos

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10-29-2010, 12:59 PM	#888
GeoffC Chocolate Grasshopper ... Posts: 27,599 Karma: 20821184 Join Date: Mar 2008 Location: Scotland Device: Muse HD , Cybook Gen3 , Pocketbook 302 (Black) , Nexus 10: wife has PW	Sneaky edit that man ... ! The first evokes the imagery of someone, perhaps, within or close to an ancient stone circle; whilst the second could be sited within icy wastes such as the Himalayas. Good example of how a change of structure can transform the meaning.

10-29-2010, 01:02 PM	#889
kennyc The Dank Side of the Moon Posts: 35,907 Karma: 119230421 Join Date: Sep 2009 Location: Denver, CO Device: Kindle2; Kindle Fire	Hmmmm......

10-29-2010, 01:04 PM	#890
GeoffC Chocolate Grasshopper ... Posts: 27,599 Karma: 20821184 Join Date: Mar 2008 Location: Scotland Device: Muse HD , Cybook Gen3 , Pocketbook 302 (Black) , Nexus 10: wife has PW	stop teasing us ! etch them both into life!

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badgoodDeb Grand Sorcerer Posts: 8,551 Karma: 64462893 Join Date: Jan 2008 Location: Harrisburg outskirts Device: Palms, K1-4s, iPads, iPhones, KV, KO1	Both versions make me think of a cemetery (the stone) ... in which case the judgement awaited would be the Final Judgement.

10-29-2010, 02:11 PM	#892
kennyc The Dank Side of the Moon Posts: 35,907 Karma: 119230421 Join Date: Sep 2009 Location: Denver, CO Device: Kindle2; Kindle Fire	Thanks Deb!

10-31-2010, 06:43 AM	#894
GeoffC Chocolate Grasshopper ... Posts: 27,599 Karma: 20821184 Join Date: Mar 2008 Location: Scotland Device: Muse HD , Cybook Gen3 , Pocketbook 302 (Black) , Nexus 10: wife has PW	A wonderful tale

10-31-2010, 04:27 PM	#897
Joebill Fanatic Posts: 517 Karma: 459442 Join Date: Jan 2010 Location: Alpha Centauri's Library of Alexandria Device: Pandigital Novel	I remember one that Frank Zappa mentions in his song 'Cheapnis'. Jet fighters, tanks, and ships firing deck guns, cannot harm the monster. The Hero and his Girlfriend are walking alone on an isolated beach. The Monster, an inverted ice cream cone of gigantic proportions with large teeth along the edge, comes out of the cave with its teeth dragging along the ground. They run, The Girlfriend falls and twists her ankle. The Hero gets out his pistol and shoots at The Monster. The monster slowly backs away. In some colpies if you look to the lower left of the screen you will see that the monster is on a skid made of wood and a hand is pushing it out of the cave. According to Frank Zappa, "They must have pushed it out too far, as you can see a hand reach out from off frame and pull the monster back towards the cave."

11-02-2010, 04:27 AM	#898
GeoffC Chocolate Grasshopper ... Posts: 27,599 Karma: 20821184 Join Date: Mar 2008 Location: Scotland Device: Muse HD , Cybook Gen3 , Pocketbook 302 (Black) , Nexus 10: wife has PW	In the deepest dark of night come out the crawlies they creep about. wee things wee things and even weirder things creep the floorboard cracks and fill 'em full of goo hog the pile lay their eggs and 'posit things that glue. long legs short legs hairy legs galore. In the deepest dark of night come out the crawlies creeping out from cracks galore from crannies and the nooks even running away from spooks. If the scary things are scared lover-love run and hide. Bedclothes beneath you hide shiver terror in your eyes. In the deepest dark of night come out the crawlies crawling about under over through between they slither and slide stroll and bide a-while watching multi-eyed feelers a-quiver. In the deepest dark of night come out the crawlies see them hear them f - e - e - l them. In the deepest dark of night shadows shudder within your mind the more you worry the more they come the more you worry worry more you will....

11-02-2010, 06:35 AM	#899
kennyc The Dank Side of the Moon Posts: 35,907 Karma: 119230421 Join Date: Sep 2009 Location: Denver, CO Device: Kindle2; Kindle Fire

11-02-2010, 08:31 AM	#900
kennyc The Dank Side of the Moon Posts: 35,907 Karma: 119230421 Join Date: Sep 2009 Location: Denver, CO Device: Kindle2; Kindle Fire	*Election Day* and now the pendulum swings - the winners lose and the losers win We’ll spend the next six months aligning and jockeying and start all over again Kenny A. Chaffin – 11/2/2010