User Poetry

[GeoffC]

Powerful words ...

[Joebill]

This one I wrote long ago: Stardust and the Desert, mentions Ozymandius.

https://www.mobileread.com/forums/sho...light=Stardust

And it was used as part of the poem and part of the idea came from it.

[montsnmags]

Originally Posted by Joebill

This one I wrote long ago: Stardust and the Desert, mentions Ozymandius.

https://www.mobileread.com/forums/sho...light=Stardust

And it was used as part of the poem and part of the idea came from it.

Love it, Joebill! I love the way you bounced off Shelley's.

My "humourous" ~ahem~ poem, based on it, was this...


Suburban Colossus

I met a traveller in the wilderness
who said "Four bent and tyreless rings of steel
lie in a marshland.'Tween them 'mongst the cress
collapsed, a hulking body lies, whose wheel
and shattered eyes, and weight of earthy press,
tell that its maker well this thing remarqued,
which yet remains, curved in a chrome-edged glee,
the road that left and the woods where parked.

"And at the rearward lip these words are writ
'SUBURBAN CHEVROLET LT', SUV:
"Look at my trek, oh nature, and submit!":
Nothing beside remains. 'Midst the stain
of that dissolving shell, verdant and wet,
fecundity and life rules All-Terrain."

[WT Sharpe]

Originally Posted by montsnmags

Love it, Joebill! I love the way you bounced off Shelley's.

My "humourous" ~ahem~ poem, based on it, was this...


Suburban Colossus

I met a traveller in the wilderness
who said "Four bent and tyreless rings of steel
lie in a marshland.'Tween them 'mongst the cress
collapsed, a hulking body lies, whose wheel
and shattered eyes, and weight of earthy press,
tell that its maker well this thing remarqued,
which yet remains, curved in a chrome-edged glee,
the road that left and the woods where parked.

"And at the rearward lip these words are writ
'SUBURBAN CHEVROLET LT', SUV:
"Look at my trek, oh nature, and submit!":
Nothing beside remains. 'Midst the stain
of that dissolving shell, verdant and wet,
fecundity and life rules All-Terrain."

Great take-off on Shelley!

[Joebill]

poem: Icey and Halloween

As I ponder the dark and dreary Halloween Night,
of long ago,
the stars sometimes sparkle through the clouds.

I can hear the wind whisper in my ear,
of frights long ago.

Bands singing off-key,
or was that Banshees screaming out there,
in the Deep Dark ?

I know not,
for I am pretending to be,
near a nice warm fireplace,
in a nice sturdy house,
in the City of No Fear !

Instead...
I am afloat,
in a spacesuit,
with no spaceship nearby,
dodging the ice and planetoids,
in the Rings of Saturn.

[ exit ]

[kennyc]

ooooohhhh! Frightful!

well done!

[kennyc]

This came up due to another thread, thought I should post it here as well. It's an older one:



Sunday

Jesus came to me at noon
we sat, broke bread and drank wine.

He asked to watch the football game;
rooted for the underdog, drank beer and belched.

I was not surprised,
this is the Jesus I know.


Kenny A. Chaffin – 12/19/02

Published in Mind Mutations Poetry Anthology - 2004

[GeoffC]

Originally Posted by Joebill

poem: Icey and Halloween

As I ponder the dark and dreary Halloween Night,
of long ago,
the stars sometimes sparkle through the clouds.

I can hear the wind whisper in my ear,
of frights long ago.

Bands singing off-key,
or was that Banshees screaming out there,
in the Deep Dark ?

I know not,
for I am pretending to be,
near a nice warm fireplace,
in a nice sturdy house,
in the City of No Fear !

Instead...
I am afloat,
in a spacesuit,
with no spaceship nearby,
dodging the ice and planetoids,
in the Rings of Saturn.

[ exit ]

Wonderful.

[kennyc]

And now.........hot off the presses (crit welcomed):

Menace to Society

As I curse the traffic and attempt to merge
she bursts up behind me
crossing the gore zone
forcing her way into the fray.

I only catch a glimpse in my rear view mirror
a cigarette dangling from her red lips
ashes about to fall
one hand filled with Starbucks
the other clutching a mascara brush.

God knows what she’s driving with.


Kenny A. Chaffin – 10/28/2010

[GeoffC]

A scene seen far too frequently. I liked the cadence - excellent imagery in those words.

[kennyc]

Thanks Geoff!

working on it, always working on it....words are tough...

[Joebill]

Thanks.

As for the words, I have lots of them. It is in the choosing, and the correct sequence, I have the difficulty.

[kennyc]

Judgment


With stone silence
around us
we wait.


Kenny A. Chaffin – 10/29/2010

[GeoffC]

Seven words that convey strong emotions

[kennyc]

Thanks Geoff.. appreciate that ..very unsure about this one....

In fact....a possible re-write:


Judgment

Surrounded
by stone cold silence
we wait.


Kenny A. Chaffin – 10/29/2010