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Old 04-19-2018, 11:08 PM   #6
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I agree that this beginning needs a lot of editing, but hey, a rough draft is expected to be rough, right? I could be interested in this story, but right now it isn't ready to be presented. Don't get discouraged though!

One last thought - are you writing YA because you are YA? The voice sounds very young, but maybe that's just your intention.
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