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Old 03-14-2014, 07:31 AM   #155
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Once the text reads more cleaning
Once the text reads more cleanly?

Marlowe, gmw's comments echo what I mentioned earlier about the length of the story coming down in editing. You've got the shape there now, and the next stage is always fun. I'm always amazed at how much I can take out without changing any of the story.

Removing stuff actually makes things stronger.

It's going to be interesting to see this at work with your story. Some of that repetition is certainly the Indian vernacular, and should be retained. gmw's advice about looking for redundant phrases is excellent, though, and the first instinct should be to remove things that don't add anything to the story.

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