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Originally Posted by michaelryannh
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The labor of a bladesmith was not an easy task, generally requiring the work of many specialists, but a simple blade as this could be done by one with dedication. Waylon had arrived long before sunrise this morning, as he always did, to ready the shop for its daily labor. This benefitted Eli greatly; his father had already prepared the forge for use. He squeezed on the bellows to force air into the forge, raising the heat of the coals. With the tongs, he grabbed a slab of the finest steel in Oakshire, placing it partly inside the forge. When the slab had finally molten, Eli began to flatten out the steel against the anvil, beginning the rough shape of his creation. Continuing this routine until lunchtime, Eli was so absorbed in the process that he did not hear the bang of the shop’s door behind him.
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What do the fellow writers think of this? |
If this is the beginning of a chapter, I would switch the order of the first two sentences:
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Waylon had arrived long before sunrise this morning, as he always did, to ready the shop for its daily labor. The labor of a bladesmith was not an easy task, generally requiring the work of many specialists, but a simple blade as this could be done by one with dedication.
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I think in fiction you are better off starting with concrete and clear facts rather than with general, abstract ideas.