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Old 04-11-2017, 11:01 AM   #16
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I do suggest mentioning somewhere that the book is the first in the series. Even if the reading order doesn't matter, people always want to know which book is the first.
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Old 04-11-2017, 01:49 PM   #17
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I agree, you can never have too many gorillas; especially when they're talking gorillas.

I've come up with a revision, let me know what you think:
I was just about to suggest that wording for the first paragraph

I found the original, awkward.

I will leave providing Bananas to Tubemonkey
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Old 04-11-2017, 11:47 PM   #18
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I'm a reader, not a writer, but I do like the sound of this and want to read this book!

Only one teeny niggle -- and it is probably only my own nitpick --- the phrase
Find out in Against the Eldest Flame!

juxtaposition of “in Against” to me is awkward, almost a stutter. How about something like:

Find out when you read Against the Eldest Flame!


That even adds bonus of involving reader in the action.
(okay, I will go back to my corner now)
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Old 04-13-2017, 05:36 PM   #19
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Just a quick status update (along with thanks for all the help). I was planning to release tomorrow, but I was just approached today by a possibly interested publisher so I'm going to see how things shake out.
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Just a quick status update (along with thanks for all the help). I was planning to release tomorrow, but I was just approached today by a possibly interested publisher so I'm going to see how things shake out.
Be sure to read the fine print and good luck.
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Old 04-21-2017, 03:44 PM   #21
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Things have shaken out, and I'm going for self-publication. It's with Amazon now and I'll update the appropriate thread once everything comes through.
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