11-09-2012, 10:11 AM | #1171 |
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I take it that no one is going to compare my effort to a Taylor Swift song about lost love?
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11-14-2012, 06:40 PM | #1172 |
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(a quick one from today, hot off the presses)
Moonstruck Four point five billion years ago Theia struck the Earth Molten magma swirled to space twisting and twirling about Two glowing orbs circled each other like gunfighters under the sun Locked in synchronous orbit they cooled and waited on man Who gathered Moon rocks and found them to be exactly the stuff of Earth So rather than cheese, it must be pie for the Moon is made of crust Kenny A. Chaffin - 11/14/2012 |
11-15-2012, 04:46 PM | #1173 |
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That's a really nice one, Kenny. It's got everything: Poetry, science, and humor!
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11-15-2012, 04:47 PM | #1174 |
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Thanks Tom.
and Cosmic-Scale Destructive Violence! Last edited by kennyc; 11-15-2012 at 05:15 PM. |
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And pie!
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11-16-2012, 08:30 AM | #1176 |
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11-18-2012, 12:13 PM | #1177 |
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Death Be Not Proud
Death be not proud for you have not bested me I’ve looked into your eyes and watched you slink away we both know one day you will win but for today it is I Kenny A. Chaffin – 7/15/2012 |
11-18-2012, 04:15 PM | #1178 |
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I just read your poem and recalled the memoir by John Gunter, in which he writes lovingly about his son who died of a brain tumor, and with the son's full knowledge that death would eventually claim his life.
This is where I first encountered the famous poem, "Death Be Not Proud,"by John Donne. Don |
11-18-2012, 04:21 PM | #1179 |
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Thanks Don! I just today read a poem in the latest Best American Poetry 2012 by Steve Orlen titled "Where Do We Go After We Die" which was written by him, knowing he only had a short time to live.
Oh and as far as the title, I knew it seemed familiar when I wrote it, but did not put it together with the John Donne poem until much later....I'm considering retitling it...may or may not.... |
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I would suggest that if your title captures the essence of what you're saying, then it needn't be changed. Of course, that's your decision...
"Do not go gentle into that good night, Old age should burn and rave at close of day; Rage, rage against the dying of the light." -- Dylan Thomas Don |
11-19-2012, 02:21 AM | #1181 |
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Nice one, Kenny.
I don't know what kind of a mood I was in when I wrote this a quarter of a century ago, but I present it without comment. It's a song, really. One that I'm rather pleased with the piano part. I'll have to record it someday. Life, Be Not Proud / W.T. Sharpe, 1987 Life, be not proud. One waking moment, then we sleep And life shall be no more Life, thou shalt go down to the deep. Jesus is dead. I wish you'd get this through your head. If he could be here right now, He'd agree with what I've said. Oh, how I wish that I could make you see - But then, where would you be? You'd be like me. Oh, how I wish that I could make you see - But then, where would you be? Oh, how I wish that I could make you see Death, Thou art King, And of Thy praises I will sing. Other gods come and go, But you forever rule all things. I believe one of our members uses that in his signature. Last edited by WT Sharpe; 11-19-2012 at 02:25 AM. |
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I think that legally titles can't be copyrighted, but as a practical matter, it makes sense to separate out our works from others.
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Protoplanet Seeks Stable Orbital Arrangement
It’s a pinball game out here multiple balls in play I can’t take it anymore I need some quiet, some space some snuggle time in a single stable relationship How long must I wait? Kenny A. Chaffin – 11/22/2012 |
12-15-2012, 10:47 AM | #1185 |
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New Town
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Parents left alone Presents left unopened Birthdays uncelebrated Weddings that will never be The town, everything is different now Kenny A. Chaffin – 12/15/12 (I know it's too early for this, but I had to try) Last edited by kennyc; 12-15-2012 at 10:49 AM. |
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