04-04-2011, 02:00 PM | #1006 |
...always be humble.
Posts: 116
Karma: 505917
Join Date: Sep 2010
Location: Fort Myers, FL USA
Device: iPhone 5s, iPod Touch 3rd Gen, Kindle 3 WiFi, Kindle Fire
|
I'm still around...
Hello, All.
I can't believe it is has been since 4 January 2011 since I've posted in this thread. When you don't keep up, you sure do get behind... @Geoff Your post of 1-16-2011 Quite interesting and certainly entertaining. you've got a nice touch with your word images. I especially like your repeating line - "Outside the shadows...". It's certainly a 'grabber". Very well written. Your post of 2-11- 2011 Bravo! Bravo! You have managed to capture the absolute essence of loving toil. Great word pictures as well as great coupling. This piece reads very well and flows along taking the reader with it. Thank you for sharing this jewel. @Caleb LOVE ME LIKE A TORTURE RACK Before I even read this, I knew I was going to like from just the title! Old or not, it certainly is well written. I had a bit of a problem with the "flow" but did try your suggestion of rreading it like two sentences. That helped. You certainly have been successful with your word images -- they put the reader right in the middle of the storm that's raging. Great work! The Journey After reading this, I ACHED for you and the knife-sharp message your poem conveyed. What wonderfully beautiful word imagery you've used in this piece. I'm quite taken with it. Beautiful work. By the way, Caleb, poetry is like music -- it is timeless and never forgotten. WELCOME I've got to say, I didn't see that ending coming... I've never hear love expressed quite that way. Interesting... @Kenny Winter Hmmm... Do I take the literal path or retreat into philosophical thoughtfulness? Either way, this piece spoke to me on so many levels. Kenny, this is very well written and in a rhythm that forces the reader to slow down and not just read but contemplate on what is being read. Thank you for sharing this beautiful work. That Big Ol' Potato Chip in the Sky A very cute little ditty. I really like your descriptiveness. A liight and deliciously entertaining read! Thanks so much, all of you, for sharing your work and allowing us a bit more of a glimpse "inside". I look forward to reading more. I'll start posting again pretty soon, as well. Have a great day! Regards, Last edited by Vandy; 04-04-2011 at 02:03 PM. |
04-04-2011, 02:19 PM | #1007 |
The Dank Side of the Moon
Posts: 35,872
Karma: 118716293
Join Date: Sep 2009
Location: Denver, CO
Device: Kindle2; Kindle Fire
|
Thanks Vandy!
|
Advert | |
|
04-05-2011, 05:34 AM | #1008 |
Chocolate Grasshopper ...
Posts: 27,600
Karma: 20821184
Join Date: Mar 2008
Location: Scotland
Device: Muse HD , Cybook Gen3 , Pocketbook 302 (Black) , Nexus 10: wife has PW
|
Vandy... many thanks for your kind comments ....
|
04-07-2011, 05:48 AM | #1009 |
The Dank Side of the Moon
Posts: 35,872
Karma: 118716293
Join Date: Sep 2009
Location: Denver, CO
Device: Kindle2; Kindle Fire
|
Girls Barbi Bambi Bella Blonde Brunette Black What does it mean when they don't come back? Kenny A. Chaffin - 4/7/2011 |
04-07-2011, 05:56 AM | #1010 |
Chocolate Grasshopper ...
Posts: 27,600
Karma: 20821184
Join Date: Mar 2008
Location: Scotland
Device: Muse HD , Cybook Gen3 , Pocketbook 302 (Black) , Nexus 10: wife has PW
|
|
Advert | |
|
04-07-2011, 06:06 AM | #1011 |
Chocolate Grasshopper ...
Posts: 27,600
Karma: 20821184
Join Date: Mar 2008
Location: Scotland
Device: Muse HD , Cybook Gen3 , Pocketbook 302 (Black) , Nexus 10: wife has PW
|
Nice one Kenny .... and to keep the momentum going ....
Memories of winter with a crisp and a crunch each step is made sinking in with a crackle-crash followed at once by a shush boot squashes to an icy print then lifts with a dash of white ridden high to back of boot the next then follows until a line to snake its way across the icy desert points the way back home…. 7 April 2011 |
04-07-2011, 06:16 AM | #1012 |
The Dank Side of the Moon
Posts: 35,872
Karma: 118716293
Join Date: Sep 2009
Location: Denver, CO
Device: Kindle2; Kindle Fire
|
Very nice Geoff. Full of sound and images!
|
04-07-2011, 10:45 AM | #1013 |
Chocolate Grasshopper ...
Posts: 27,600
Karma: 20821184
Join Date: Mar 2008
Location: Scotland
Device: Muse HD , Cybook Gen3 , Pocketbook 302 (Black) , Nexus 10: wife has PW
|
|
04-07-2011, 01:22 PM | #1014 |
...always be humble.
Posts: 116
Karma: 505917
Join Date: Sep 2010
Location: Fort Myers, FL USA
Device: iPhone 5s, iPod Touch 3rd Gen, Kindle 3 WiFi, Kindle Fire
|
Comments...
@ Kenny Girls
I read it the first time and thought, "Huh? What's this!?!?" I read it the second time and thought, "Why wouldn't they come back?" I read it the third time and am now hopelessly locked in a philosophical debate with myself... Interesting, Kenny, interesting... @ Geoff Memories of Winter You really have a great way with words and word images, Geoff. This is really a very good piece. I especially like your "icy desert" image. Great work! Regards, |
04-07-2011, 03:20 PM | #1015 | |
The Dank Side of the Moon
Posts: 35,872
Karma: 118716293
Join Date: Sep 2009
Location: Denver, CO
Device: Kindle2; Kindle Fire
|
Quote:
|
|
04-08-2011, 09:19 AM | #1016 |
Indie Advocate
Posts: 2,863
Karma: 18794463
Join Date: Sep 2010
Location: Melbourne, Australia
Device: Kindle
|
Wow Vandy, thanks for your comments. It's been a long time since I've actually written new poetry. My angsty youth was such a hotbed of inspiration.
I would post lyrics to songs, but they don't have the same effect if read. You really need to hear them with the movement of music for them to make sense. Regards Caleb |
04-08-2011, 09:24 AM | #1017 | |
Indie Advocate
Posts: 2,863
Karma: 18794463
Join Date: Sep 2010
Location: Melbourne, Australia
Device: Kindle
|
Quote:
"His yumminess filling my tumminess" That really works for me. Regards Caleb |
|
04-08-2011, 09:31 AM | #1018 |
Indie Advocate
Posts: 2,863
Karma: 18794463
Join Date: Sep 2010
Location: Melbourne, Australia
Device: Kindle
|
A really small one that I wrote as a gift on my first anniversary. It's timely as tomorrow is my sixth anniversary.
It's untitled. I like the rain, It feels gravity too, It falls to the earth As I fall into you, One drop at a time. See me let go, I fly like an eagle, The higher I soar Is the longer I'm with you, One day at a time. Regards Caleb |
04-08-2011, 11:22 AM | #1019 |
The Dank Side of the Moon
Posts: 35,872
Karma: 118716293
Join Date: Sep 2009
Location: Denver, CO
Device: Kindle2; Kindle Fire
|
|
04-10-2011, 04:39 AM | #1020 | |
Chocolate Grasshopper ...
Posts: 27,600
Karma: 20821184
Join Date: Mar 2008
Location: Scotland
Device: Muse HD , Cybook Gen3 , Pocketbook 302 (Black) , Nexus 10: wife has PW
|
Quote:
|
|
Tags |
poetry, squirrelku |
|
Similar Threads | ||||
Thread | Thread Starter | Forum | Replies | Last Post |
Poetry Tuesday? | Stitchawl | Lounge | 5 | 10-06-2009 07:46 AM |
Got POETRY? | Dr. Drib | Writers' Corner | 36 | 04-02-2009 11:18 AM |
Poetry recommendations? | ficbot | Reading Recommendations | 1 | 03-14-2009 12:19 PM |
Unutterably Silly Not User Poetry | Dr. Drib | Lounge | 7 | 11-16-2008 12:57 PM |
Poetry by committee | GeoffC | Lounge | 34 | 06-06-2008 07:13 PM |