User Poetry - Page 5

Taylor514ce · 05-04-2008, 07:35 PM

There was a farmer whose barn
got smashed down by some hail,
so he built a brand new barn
and he built it very well.

His name was ManWhoTakesCareOfAnimals
'cause that is what he did
and the animals all loved him
and did everything he said.

The animals were so happy!
The went outside to play.
They took a very red ball
and played with it all day.

They put it in their mouths
and spit it out real fast.
That's how animals play catch
since they don't got any hands.

(From my Shel Silverstein phase.)

zelda_pinwheel · 05-04-2008, 07:37 PM

aw, i like that one.

Taylor514ce · 05-04-2008, 07:42 PM

Thanks. For awhile there, my kids were my collaborators, willing or unwilling. The "that's how animals play catch" was snatched out of a conversation between my boys when they were little.

Taylor514ce · 05-04-2008, 09:54 PM

As long as I'm on a roll, let's give a nod to this thread, and let's also keep it vaguely French, by using the form Rondeau Prime

Ths pg is 2 dmn small, my wrting gets all sqshd
How cn I write half the wrds
I wnt to write, it's absrd
But if I hd what I wshd
This pg'd be as big as T H I S
Jst to me has ths occrd?
Ths pg is 2 dmn small!

Jst imagn wht u hav missed,
all the things u havnt heard,
the suble thghts I've infrred
You'll nver see, cuz (I'm pssd)
This pg is 2 dmn small!

DaleDe · 05-05-2008, 10:20 AM

Quote:

Originally Posted by Taylor514ce

As long as I'm on a roll, let's give a nod to this thread, and let's also keep it vaguely French, by using the form Rondeau Prime

Ths pg is 2 dmn small, my wrting gets all sqshd
How cn I write half the wrds
I wnt to write, it's absrd
But if I hd what I wshd
This pg'd be as big as T H I S
Jst to me has ths occrd?
Ths pg is 2 dmn small!

Jst imagn wht u hav missed,
all the things u havnt heard,
the suble thghts I've infrred
You'll nver see, cuz (I'm pssd)
This pg is 2 dmn small!

Been doing a lot of text messaging lately?

Dale

Taylor514ce · 05-05-2008, 02:11 PM

Traveling through a fabled land,
seeking the answer to karma
I heard stories of a holy man
who knew all the laws of dharma.

He lived atop a secret mountain,
the trail was hidden from sight,
beside a glittering fountain,
chanting mantras through the night.

I followed dreams and avatars
until at last I found the way.
He listened to me strum my guitar
as I wondered what he would say.

He opened his mouth to speak,
perched on that mountain crown,
and said in a voice tired and weak,
"Thank God. Could you show me how to get down?"

badgoodDeb · 05-06-2008, 03:09 PM

Quote:

Originally Posted by DaleDe

Been doing a lot of text messaging lately?

Dale

My thoughts exactly! I love the "Cell Phone Rondeau"

Taylor514ce · 05-07-2008, 11:00 AM

I had to use code tags to preserve formatting.

Code:

*
 *polo!   *polo*
    f   i r*  f   e
       *marco!*     l*    s
  *polo*

Subliminal Explanation:

This one may take some explanation. It was the opening verse in collaborative poem, called a "renga". If you look closely you'll see some fireflies, on a summer night, with kids outdoors playing Marco Polo. Or maybe that's what the fireflies are doing? You decide.

badgoodDeb · 05-07-2008, 02:11 PM

Reminds me of a.a.milne -- i think -- the person who used a lot of spacing in poetry.

pshrynk · 05-07-2008, 02:14 PM

... And just see if I don't!

(I spared you the rest of the translation from the original Vogon.)

mjh215 · 05-10-2008, 06:24 PM

My squirrel-fu

Carefully I open the door
The tail twitches
My finger itches
A scamper, scurry, and shot
The squirrel he is no more

-MJ

Taylor514ce · 05-11-2008, 09:51 PM

driving to work
I swerve to miss the
twice-squished squirrel

badgoodDeb · 05-12-2008, 03:38 PM

I wish I had a squirrel, I do.
They're so much fun to chase.
But if I ever catch one
Mama's sure to wash my face.

Charley the shih tzu

Taylor514ce · 05-12-2008, 06:27 PM

The "car" thread reminded me of a quick jot I made once, intending to turn it into poem. It never worked out, and I no longer drive the supporting character, so... I'll stash it here.

Self-Portrait

Cruising through downtown in a '67 Chevy pickup, finger-snapping each stoplight green, bellowing "Sweet Baby James" out the won't-stay-rolled up window, while the burned-out dash bulbs, like polished hematite, rattle out the hole in the floorboard; dressed in denim and stubble, my head turning to follow brunettes in heels, those pretty office girls clickety-clacking their way through pigeons and the leers of fellow aficionados, I park in brick-paved alleyways with the engine idling to hoof it into bookstores, asking after periodicals to be told "no", leaving with smiles and backfire.

Patricia · 05-12-2008, 09:08 PM

'Manage Attachments'
--Would it were so simple
Away from the screen.

05-04-2008, 07:35 PM	#61
Taylor514ce Actively passive. Posts: 2,042 Karma: 478376 Join Date: Feb 2008 Location: US Device: Sony PRS-505/LC	A Farmer, A Barn, Some Animals There was a farmer whose barn got smashed down by some hail, so he built a brand new barn and he built it very well. His name was ManWhoTakesCareOfAnimals 'cause that is what he did and the animals all loved him and did everything he said. The animals were so happy! The went outside to play. They took a very red ball and played with it all day. They put it in their mouths and spit it out real fast. That's how animals play catch since they don't got any hands. (From my Shel Silverstein phase.)

05-05-2008, 02:11 PM	#66
Taylor514ce Actively passive. Posts: 2,042 Karma: 478376 Join Date: Feb 2008 Location: US Device: Sony PRS-505/LC	Traveling through a fabled land, seeking the answer to karma I heard stories of a holy man who knew all the laws of dharma. He lived atop a secret mountain, the trail was hidden from sight, beside a glittering fountain, chanting mantras through the night. I followed dreams and avatars until at last I found the way. He listened to me strum my guitar as I wondered what he would say. He opened his mouth to speak, perched on that mountain crown, and said in a voice tired and weak, "Thank God. Could you show me how to get down?" Last edited by Taylor514ce; 05-07-2008 at 11:03 AM.

05-07-2008, 11:00 AM	#68
Taylor514ce Actively passive. Posts: 2,042 Karma: 478376 Join Date: Feb 2008 Location: US Device: Sony PRS-505/LC	Fireflies I had to use code tags to preserve formatting. Code: * polo! polo* f i r* f e marco! l* s polo Subliminal Explanation: This one may take some explanation. It was the opening verse in collaborative poem, called a "renga". If you look closely you'll see some fireflies, on a summer night, with kids outdoors playing Marco Polo. Or maybe that's what the fireflies are doing? You decide. Last edited by Taylor514ce; 05-07-2008 at 11:02 AM.

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05-04-2008, 07:37 PM	#62
zelda_pinwheel zeldinha zippy zeldissima Posts: 27,827 Karma: 921169 Join Date: Dec 2007 Location: Paris, France Device: eb1150 & is that a nook in her pocket, or she just happy to see you?	aw, i like that one.

05-04-2008, 07:42 PM	#63
Taylor514ce Actively passive. Posts: 2,042 Karma: 478376 Join Date: Feb 2008 Location: US Device: Sony PRS-505/LC	Thanks. For awhile there, my kids were my collaborators, willing or unwilling. The "that's how animals play catch" was snatched out of a conversation between my boys when they were little.

05-04-2008, 09:54 PM	#64
Taylor514ce Actively passive. Posts: 2,042 Karma: 478376 Join Date: Feb 2008 Location: US Device: Sony PRS-505/LC	As long as I'm on a roll, let's give a nod to this thread, and let's also keep it vaguely French, by using the form Rondeau Prime Ths pg is 2 dmn small, my wrting gets all sqshd How cn I write half the wrds I wnt to write, it's absrd But if I hd what I wshd This pg'd be as big as T H I S Jst to me has ths occrd? Ths pg is 2 dmn small! Jst imagn wht u hav missed, all the things u havnt heard, the suble thghts I've infrred You'll nver see, cuz (I'm pssd) This pg is 2 dmn small!

05-07-2008, 02:11 PM	#69
badgoodDeb Grand Sorcerer Posts: 8,501 Karma: 64095689 Join Date: Jan 2008 Location: Harrisburg outskirts Device: Palms, K1-4s, iPads, iPhones, KV, KO1	Reminds me of a.a.milne -- i think -- the person who used a lot of spacing in poetry.

05-07-2008, 02:14 PM	#70
pshrynk Beepbeep n beebeep, yeah! Posts: 11,726 Karma: 8255450 Join Date: Apr 2008 Location: La Crosse, Wisconsin, aka America's IceBox Device: iThingie, KmkII, I miss Zelda!	... And just see if I don't! (I spared you the rest of the translation from the original Vogon.)

05-10-2008, 06:24 PM	#71
mjh215 Guru Posts: 988 Karma: 12653 Join Date: Apr 2008 Device: None of your business	My squirrel-fu Carefully I open the door The tail twitches My finger itches A scamper, scurry, and shot The squirrel he is no more -MJ

05-11-2008, 09:51 PM	#72
Taylor514ce Actively passive. Posts: 2,042 Karma: 478376 Join Date: Feb 2008 Location: US Device: Sony PRS-505/LC	driving to work I swerve to miss the twice-squished squirrel

05-12-2008, 03:38 PM	#73
badgoodDeb Grand Sorcerer Posts: 8,501 Karma: 64095689 Join Date: Jan 2008 Location: Harrisburg outskirts Device: Palms, K1-4s, iPads, iPhones, KV, KO1	I wish I had a squirrel, I do. They're so much fun to chase. But if I ever catch one Mama's sure to wash my face. Charley the shih tzu

05-12-2008, 06:27 PM	#74
Taylor514ce Actively passive. Posts: 2,042 Karma: 478376 Join Date: Feb 2008 Location: US Device: Sony PRS-505/LC	The "car" thread reminded me of a quick jot I made once, intending to turn it into poem. It never worked out, and I no longer drive the supporting character, so... I'll stash it here. Self-Portrait Cruising through downtown in a '67 Chevy pickup, finger-snapping each stoplight green, bellowing "Sweet Baby James" out the won't-stay-rolled up window, while the burned-out dash bulbs, like polished hematite, rattle out the hole in the floorboard; dressed in denim and stubble, my head turning to follow brunettes in heels, those pretty office girls clickety-clacking their way through pigeons and the leers of fellow aficionados, I park in brick-paved alleyways with the engine idling to hoof it into bookstores, asking after periodicals to be told "no", leaving with smiles and backfire.

05-12-2008, 09:08 PM	#75
Patricia Reader Posts: 11,504 Karma: 8720163 Join Date: May 2007 Location: South Wales, UK Device: Sony PRS-500, PRS-505, Asus EEEpc 4G	'Manage Attachments' --Would it were so simple Away from the screen.

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