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Old 09-21-2009, 03:39 PM   #1
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Continuation - A Short Story
Hi,

Just uploaded a new short story to Feedbooks, you'll find it here.

It is some speculative science fiction and I am sure it still contains many errors (it's only my second piece ) But I hope you can look past my writing failures and enjoy the narrative it contains.

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So I died, and to be totally honest with you it was a lot more painful than I had expected. A hell of a lot more painful. But then again I am fairly sure that you are not supposed to remember the actual death part, if you know what I mean.
No, you don't, do you?
You're aware of Life Extension Technologies Inc.?
No?
Okay, I think I had better explain a little,.
Actually, I had better go back to the very beginning.
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Old 09-21-2009, 03:40 PM   #2
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YAY! OK, now that I know you were writing, then I won't have to wonder where you have been lately. Gonna go get the book now.
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Old 09-21-2009, 04:05 PM   #5
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You guys should go ahead and read it, only 8 pages of story. Pev, you did a good job! I really enjoyed it. The sci part of the fi was very believable. I could see this as a modern day "Twilight Zone" episode. Great story!
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I loved your other story and just grabbed this one. Loading my Reader now.
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Old 09-21-2009, 04:39 PM   #7
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You guys should go ahead and read it, only 8 pages of story. Pev, you did a good job! I really enjoyed it. The sci part of the fi was very believable. I could see this as a modern day "Twilight Zone" episode. Great story!
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I am so pleased you enjoyed it :-)
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Old 09-21-2009, 08:12 PM   #9
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I totally dug it, Peverel. I usually don't read SciFi [*collective gasp of horror from MR members*], but this was pretty cool.

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My favorite part was the Pope taking on the "burden" of being God's final rep on earth. The ending just made me sad.
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Old 09-22-2009, 12:35 AM   #11
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Peverel, I almost was late for work because I had to finish your story.. It was so believable (and yeah, the pope comment cracked me up).

I can't wait to read more of your stories.

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