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01-14-2018, 02:16 PM | #49 | |
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Disregard the 'You're'; I don't know what I was thinking! I guess I need more coffee in the morning! I remember one of the most horrific killings in fiction, written by Jerzy Kosinski, but I can't remember which book it was in. Let's just say a sword was used, slowly and carefully inserted. Uggghhhh! |
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Ok I can think of only one place to insert that sword for a guy and two for a woman. OUCH. |
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For some reason, I read your sentence wrong. I think almost every educated person who understands English realizes that 'you're' is a contraction for 'you are', which certainly doesn't apply to your sentence! At that point, I don't believe I was fully awake! ------ Actually, it was the description of the act that was so horrifying. I need to go back and re-read the book, after I determine which title it was. Spoiler for the squeamish: Spoiler:
I have great admiration for jerzy Kozinski's writing. I remember being shocked by his suicide. I thought "The Painted Bird," and "Being There" were incredible novels. |
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In that case I still figured you started a sentence and changed your mind. Ok I thought right on the where. |
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Okay, for argument's sake, let's say the blurb's way off. It's not etched in stone. How should it change? |
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01-16-2018, 12:51 AM | #57 | |
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Now for a nit-pick. Unless Lainey was cross dressing, there is no way she was studying in a Buddhist temple to be a monk. Oh and that scene is not cartoonish. |
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LOL Honestly, I hope someone calls me on the Buddhist thing. (Good catch.) Yeah, it's not cartoonish, but look at the covers for Carl Hiaasen or Tim Dorsey. They're not cartoonish writers and their covers are totally cartoonish and so are their blurbs. So cartoonish seems the way for me to go. I think the cover with the dogs is good. The woman just needs to be less Mary Poppinish. |
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Does the author just love that statement. Not to mention the fact that it is hard for a s*** to hate men. Trivia: NASCAR guy turned me off of Janet Evanovich. She repeated that way too many times in one of her books. |
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