Editing suggestions for my book

[Cinisajoy]

Originally Posted by E.M.DuBois

Ugh... I finally did it. After a lot of editing, re-editing, sitting on it, and letting what I wanted fully mature instead of jumping the gun, I finally sat down... and cut down the Prologue from 9 pages to 3. Basically, it's Laura, the grave, the dream, a quick mention of the photo of her dad and his friends, and a quick glimpse at the red-rings in the sky and a mention that all clues to the forgotten day they appeared pointed toward her father. Everything else will be saved for Book 6 of the series. It hurt a little less knowing all that would come back in the that installment of the series.

Want me to proofread the Prologue for you since I started you on this new journey?

[E.M.DuBois]

Originally Posted by Cinisajoy

Want me to proofread the Prologue for you since I started you on this new journey?

Just warning you now (relating to your earlier criticism,) it is still a Prologue for a longer series, so it's still Laura, and Lance is still dead, nearly 40 years after the story begins. Now, this is the part where I could tell you where I am going with the Prologue and what points/conclusions/emotions I want you to come to/experience, but I won't. I'd rather see what YOU, as the reader, experience. Because that's much more interesting.

[Cinisajoy]

Originally Posted by E.M.DuBois

Just warning you now (relating to your earlier criticism,) it is still a Prologue for a longer series, so it's still Laura, and Lance is still dead, nearly 40 years after the story begins. Now, this is the part where I could tell you where I am going with the Prologue and what points/conclusions/emotions I want you to come to/experience, but I won't. I'd rather see what YOU, as the reader, experience. Because that's much more interesting.

Message me for my email address. I will try to be kind.
I just want to make sure it isn't awkward.

[E.M.DuBois]

So, after over a year since publishing many attempts, much hair pulled out, learning a lot from pdf’s, and begging my supervisor for a raise while agreeing to also work a shit-ton of overtime, I’ve finally gotten to a point where I can take your guys’ advice. I hired a professional editor for The Savior Libra.

(Didn’t want a whole new thread to say this, when I knew a relevant thread already existed. Sorry if I violated an anti-thread-revival rule.)

[gmw]

I think it's very appropriate to revive this thread for the update. And that's very good news, I hope it all goes really well for you.

[E.M.DuBois]

Me too, and thank you for the goodwill. I can't wait to get back to marketing, and until then, I'm going to enjoy all the extra time to work on the sequel and my other projects.