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Old 01-09-2018, 04:52 AM   #16
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I like the bottom half and the colour scheme much better.

I hate the font for the title. I think the all centred text is a bit dull. I think the title needs to be bigger, and the series info reduced.

And change that hyphen to an em-dash!
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What does she have, a fan under her britches? that's what I'm telling you already!

Or glue in her hair? Eh? Her Dracula cape is caught in a tough cross-wind like in California, I say, and the glue in her hair is fastened tight like a wound clock to her pate, so her skull can't breathe!

That's what I'm saying!

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Old 01-09-2018, 03:13 PM   #18
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Gregg, I like most of what you've done there. I am inclined to think that the book title could be larger in comparison to the subtitle ("... Book 1" and "... Tripper Novel") elements. And/or maybe the the author name could go down in size a little.

... Basically, I don't think the proportions are quite right yet, but the colours are working fairly well for me.

Not sure I'm entirely convinced by the cape. I like the idea, it just doesn't look all that natural. And, now it's no longer lost in the background the less-than-perfect appearance is more obvious.
Thanks gmw. I agree with the title and subtitle issues. And I can work on the proportions. The cape I'm not worried about as it's meant to be cartoonish. I'll be back with a new version.
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Old 01-09-2018, 03:15 PM   #19
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I like the bottom half and the colour scheme much better.

I hate the font for the title. I think the all centred text is a bit dull. I think the title needs to be bigger, and the series info reduced.

And change that hyphen to an em-dash!
Ha ha. Thanks Paul. Okay. I hear you about the font and text and title needing to be bigger. And I'll take care of the hyphen!
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Old 01-09-2018, 03:16 PM   #20
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What does she have, a fan under her britches? that's what I'm telling you already!

Or glue in her hair? Eh? Her Dracula cape is caught in a tough cross-wind like in California, I say, and the glue in her hair is fastened tight like a wound clock to her pate, so her skull can't breathe!

That's what I'm saying!

Britches? Ha ha.
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Old 01-09-2018, 06:43 PM   #21
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What does she have, a fan under her britches? that's what I'm telling you already!

Or glue in her hair? Eh? Her Dracula cape is caught in a tough cross-wind like in California, I say, and the glue in her hair is fastened tight like a wound clock to her pate, so her skull can't breathe!

That's what I'm saying!

Perhaps she used a lot of hairspray, knowing she would be out in high winds

I like that the series and number are included on the cover. I wish all series books had this info on the front.
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In all seriousness, I'm thinking "101 Dalmatians."

(Where's the Pug? That's the dog I own.)
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Old 01-09-2018, 06:50 PM   #23
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In all seriousness, I'm thinking "101 Dalmatians."

(Where's the Pug? That's the dog I own.)
It needs a chihuahua. Heck put the Cape on the chihuahua.
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Old 01-09-2018, 08:18 PM   #24
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Stead of all caps, use normal capilitization, perhaps make the first letters a tad larger or just a little bolder. Offset the title so it isn't so center balanced.

All caps looks more like a notice or headline. It just doesn't look right IMO. The acronym should be all caps, just not the rest. If you want to stick to all caps, make the letters smaller instead of lower case.
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Old 01-09-2018, 11:41 PM   #25
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Stead of all caps, use normal capilitization, perhaps make the first letters a tad larger or just a little bolder. Offset the title so it isn't so center balanced.

All caps looks more like a notice or headline. It just doesn't look right IMO. The acronym should be all caps, just not the rest. If you want to stick to all caps, make the letters smaller instead of lower case.
Thanks Desk. Just got done working on it. I'll check out your suggestions tomorrow. What will offsetting the title accomplish?
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Old 01-10-2018, 12:49 AM   #27
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I like the visual balance of the second (green title) better than the first (blue title), and yet the blue title stands out more clearly.

Could you move the "of the" after the "Rise" (but still as small text, two lines total height matching the one line of "Rise"):

Rise of/the
Animal Rescue
Feminists

And then use the extra space to increase the overall size of the main title. In fact, I would be tempted to remove one of your subtitles, or merge them into the one line. To me it all looks a bit busy up top - especially in thumbnail view - which has the title getting lost amid the noise. Is that tagline? Is that a subtitle? No, it's its a super-title! (Whether it looks like one or not.)
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I'm sorry--I hate both of those. I believe it's the fonts--it looks too cartoony/jokey. I realize that the book is dark humor, but that's not the same thing as cartoony.

Let me ask you this, Gregg: what kind of FEEL were you going for, with the fonts?

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I preferred the pink background. You could try dropping the series number (The IWS Rules -- Book 1) to small text below your name, move the description (A Lainey Tripper Novel) to the top, above the title, and then make the title bigger and more typographically interesting.
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Stead of all caps, use normal capilitization, perhaps make the first letters a tad larger or just a little bolder. Offset the title so it isn't so center balanced.

All caps looks more like a notice or headline. It just doesn't look right IMO. The acronym should be all caps, just not the rest. If you want to stick to all caps, make the letters smaller instead of lower case.

"Stead"?

hy o ou ot ike 'in'?

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