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"Lainey, forearms bloody from the cut glass, pried her knife from the dead thug’s hand."
I get confused when she hits him in the balls with the knife. It's not clear that she stabbed him. Or did she? Having read many Amazon reviews when choosing books, I can imagine lots of readers would be offended by the blunt language, especially as the cover and blurb give no indication of what to expect. Last edited by BookCat; 01-11-2018 at 09:45 PM. |
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The whole thing's being scrapped, Jon. People say the cover ain't matching the excerpt. (post #79) Starting from scratch.
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I'm starting over from scratch, Catlady. The cover doesn't match the writing. I don't know if you saw the excerpt (post #79).
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Whatever you use, just Google it first. International Women's Society is in use in a number of places.
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"Well, I'm glad I found out now. I'll just start over. That first scene is uber violent. The rest of the book is not as violent. It's sillier but still, there's plenty of violence."
Maybe begin the book in a different place. When you put this on Amazon the kindle "Look Inside" always shows the beginning. If this scene isn't typical of the novel as a whole, perhaps cut it from the beginning and move it somewhere else. |
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Switchblades. Illegal, but it doesn't seem the heroine would be concerned about that.
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