User Poetry - Page 66

kennyc · 01-16-2011, 09:10 AM

Well done Caleb. Thanks for sharing this.

GeoffC · 01-16-2011, 09:12 AM

Quote:

Originally Posted by caleb72

Very very old poem I wrote when I was in high school (I think).

LOVE ME LIKE A TORTURE RACK

A breath of wind stirs the leaves
Of the cypress trees along my grove
Of memories embedded deep
In my past and yet
I see a beach with sunset hills
Of blood red dunes
Streaked with the pain of knowing
You are not near.

My heart is torn inside my breast
And thunder storms rage in the
Nightmare of your departure
Leaving me in anguish and in
The arms of an icy
Land of indifference
And rock hard torture
Set me free.

It's a bit hard to get across how this poem is supposed to sound as I wrote it to be read aloud a certain way. It's meant to be read like two sentences, each spoken without taking a breath.

Anyway - that's an old one.

Regards
Caleb

I found it easy to read with a nice rhythm ....

caleb72 · 01-16-2011, 09:29 AM

Thanks.

I will try to find one or two more old and tortured poems. I have a bunch of them somewhere.

Regards
Caleb

kennyc · 01-16-2011, 09:39 AM

No waterboarding of poems around here Caleb! It's against out principals.

caleb72 · 01-16-2011, 09:49 AM

OK - found one that doesn't make me want to vomit with embarrassment. From 1990.

The Journey

I thought I'd grow weary of far away lights
I thought that I'd tire of following a star
I never knew that through the cold night
I would travel so long, I would travel so far.

At times I feel it's so hopeless, so blind
I think that it's wrong not to know who you are
But I continue to trudge along in my mind
To find my salvation, to discover my star.

I wish I could pause and rest for a while
I feel hungry, unsheltered, cold and alone
But I know I must carry my cross with a smile
For as I persist, I am closer to home.

If I remember rightly, I wrote that one in high school when a teacher gave us a last opportunity to enter a national poetry competition (Dorothea Mackellar). I didn't want to miss out so I quickly scrawled this out while the announcement was being made. The competition theme was "Closer to Home".

I got one of those "Highly Recommended" awards, which for all I knew was what all losing poetry received. Didn't stop me from being at least mildly impressed with myself.

What impresses me more is that I even remember all of this. That was just over 20 years ago.

Regards
Caleb

caleb72 · 01-16-2011, 09:57 AM

And while I'm on a roll, here's one that still makes me feel things when I read it, so I should probably add it here.

WELCOME

The pain as it hits you
The tidal wave hits you
You flounder and struggle
You're gasping for air.

With cramps and convulsions
You wretch in revulsion
And spew out the oceans
Of torment and fear.

It whips and it severs
And shreds your forevers
It rips out your insides
And renders you numb.

Without hesitation
With no explanation
No future redemption
So welcome to love.

Edit: Forgot to mention that was from 1995.

Regards
Caleb

GeoffC · 01-16-2011, 10:19 AM

Quote:

Originally Posted by caleb72

And while I'm on a roll, here's one that still makes me feel things when I read it, so I should probably add it here.

WELCOME

The pain as it hits you
The tidal wave hits you
You flounder and struggle
You're gasping for air.

With cramps and convulsions
You wretch in revulsion
And spew out the oceans
Of torment and fear.

It whips and it severs
And shreds your forevers
It rips out your insides
And renders you numb.

Without hesitation
With no explanation
No future redemption
So welcome to love.

Edit: Forgot to mention that was from 1995.

Regards
Caleb

Strewth you must have had a wonderful childhood .... Brilliant though ...

kennyc · 01-16-2011, 11:00 AM

Thanks for those Caleb.

kennyc · 01-21-2011, 01:21 PM

Not a poem, but an AI that translates poetry from Google....

http://www.npr.org/2011/01/16/132959...nslates-poetry

GeoffC · 01-22-2011, 05:13 AM

It'll lack a soul and that's one of the most important aspects ....

caleb72 · 01-23-2011, 06:21 AM

Great as an academic exercise. Many areas of digital art have introduced some sort of AI component - particularly in music.

I'll take inspiration where I can get it because let's face it, nothing is really coming fully from us. We just synthesise experiences of the external into coherence. No reason why a computer program can't be part of that process.

Regards
Caleb

kennyc · 02-09-2011, 06:33 AM

Winter

Steel grey skies
await the sun which will not come

Squirrels clamber over icy branches
searching for buds that will not bloom

Winter goes on forever

I search my memory for another time like this
and come away empty.

Kenny A. Chaffin – 2/9/2011

GeoffC · 02-09-2011, 07:49 AM

Quote:

Originally Posted by kennyc

Winter

Steel grey skies
await the sun which will not come

Squirrels clamber over icy branches
searching for buds that will not bloom

Winter goes on forever

I search my memory for another time like this
and come away empty.

Kenny A. Chaffin – 2/9/2011

Marvellous

kennyc · 02-09-2011, 08:06 AM

Thank you Geoff....I think I did finish it...will mull it over a bit.

WT Sharpe · 02-09-2011, 10:08 AM

Bravo, Kenny. That's marvelous. It really evokes a mood.

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01-16-2011, 09:10 AM	#976
kennyc The Dank Side of the Moon Posts: 35,920 Karma: 119747553 Join Date: Sep 2009 Location: Denver, CO Device: Kindle2 & PW, Onyx Boox Go6	Well done Caleb. Thanks for sharing this.

01-16-2011, 09:29 AM	#978
caleb72 Indie Advocate Posts: 2,863 Karma: 18794463 Join Date: Sep 2010 Location: Melbourne, Australia Device: Kindle	Thanks. I will try to find one or two more old and tortured poems. I have a bunch of them somewhere. Regards Caleb

01-16-2011, 09:39 AM	#979
kennyc The Dank Side of the Moon Posts: 35,920 Karma: 119747553 Join Date: Sep 2009 Location: Denver, CO Device: Kindle2 & PW, Onyx Boox Go6	No waterboarding of poems around here Caleb! It's against out principals.

01-16-2011, 09:49 AM	#980
caleb72 Indie Advocate Posts: 2,863 Karma: 18794463 Join Date: Sep 2010 Location: Melbourne, Australia Device: Kindle	OK - found one that doesn't make me want to vomit with embarrassment. From 1990. The Journey I thought I'd grow weary of far away lights I thought that I'd tire of following a star I never knew that through the cold night I would travel so long, I would travel so far. At times I feel it's so hopeless, so blind I think that it's wrong not to know who you are But I continue to trudge along in my mind To find my salvation, to discover my star. I wish I could pause and rest for a while I feel hungry, unsheltered, cold and alone But I know I must carry my cross with a smile For as I persist, I am closer to home. If I remember rightly, I wrote that one in high school when a teacher gave us a last opportunity to enter a national poetry competition (Dorothea Mackellar). I didn't want to miss out so I quickly scrawled this out while the announcement was being made. The competition theme was "Closer to Home". I got one of those "Highly Recommended" awards, which for all I knew was what all losing poetry received. Didn't stop me from being at least mildly impressed with myself. What impresses me more is that I even remember all of this. That was just over 20 years ago. Regards Caleb

01-16-2011, 09:57 AM	#981
caleb72 Indie Advocate Posts: 2,863 Karma: 18794463 Join Date: Sep 2010 Location: Melbourne, Australia Device: Kindle	And while I'm on a roll, here's one that still makes me feel things when I read it, so I should probably add it here. WELCOME The pain as it hits you The tidal wave hits you You flounder and struggle You're gasping for air. With cramps and convulsions You wretch in revulsion And spew out the oceans Of torment and fear. It whips and it severs And shreds your forevers It rips out your insides And renders you numb. Without hesitation With no explanation No future redemption So welcome to love. Edit: Forgot to mention that was from 1995. Regards Caleb

01-16-2011, 11:00 AM	#983
kennyc The Dank Side of the Moon Posts: 35,920 Karma: 119747553 Join Date: Sep 2009 Location: Denver, CO Device: Kindle2 & PW, Onyx Boox Go6	Thanks for those Caleb.

01-21-2011, 01:21 PM	#984
kennyc The Dank Side of the Moon Posts: 35,920 Karma: 119747553 Join Date: Sep 2009 Location: Denver, CO Device: Kindle2 & PW, Onyx Boox Go6	Not a poem, but an AI that translates poetry from Google.... http://www.npr.org/2011/01/16/132959...nslates-poetry

01-22-2011, 05:13 AM	#985
GeoffC Chocolate Grasshopper ... Posts: 27,599 Karma: 20821184 Join Date: Mar 2008 Location: Scotland Device: Muse HD , Cybook Gen3 , Pocketbook 302 (Black) , Nexus 10: wife has PW	It'll lack a soul and that's one of the most important aspects ....

01-23-2011, 06:21 AM	#986
caleb72 Indie Advocate Posts: 2,863 Karma: 18794463 Join Date: Sep 2010 Location: Melbourne, Australia Device: Kindle	Great as an academic exercise. Many areas of digital art have introduced some sort of AI component - particularly in music. I'll take inspiration where I can get it because let's face it, nothing is really coming fully from us. We just synthesise experiences of the external into coherence. No reason why a computer program can't be part of that process. Regards Caleb

02-09-2011, 06:33 AM	#987
kennyc The Dank Side of the Moon Posts: 35,920 Karma: 119747553 Join Date: Sep 2009 Location: Denver, CO Device: Kindle2 & PW, Onyx Boox Go6	*Winter* Steel grey skies await the sun which will not come Squirrels clamber over icy branches searching for buds that will not bloom Winter goes on forever I search my memory for another time like this and come away empty. Kenny A. Chaffin – 2/9/2011

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02-09-2011, 08:06 AM	#989
kennyc The Dank Side of the Moon Posts: 35,920 Karma: 119747553 Join Date: Sep 2009 Location: Denver, CO Device: Kindle2 & PW, Onyx Boox Go6	Thank you Geoff....I think I did finish it...will mull it over a bit.

02-09-2011, 10:08 AM	#990
WT Sharpe Bah, humbug! Posts: 39,072 Karma: 157049943 Join Date: Jun 2009 Location: Chesapeake, VA, USA Device: Kindle Oasis, iPad Pro, & a Samsung Galaxy S9.	Bravo, Kenny. That's marvelous. It really evokes a mood.