User Poetry - Page 61

GeoffC · 11-02-2010, 09:36 AM

Quote:

Originally Posted by kennyc

Election Day

and now the pendulum
swings -
the winners lose
and the losers win

We’ll spend
the next six months
aligning and jockeying
and start all over again

Kenny A. Chaffin – 11/2/2010

as ever t'was thus.

these things come around too frequently, like leap years ....

kennyc · 11-06-2010, 09:32 AM

Here's an old one. I just ran across:

In the Evening

Bitch white trace
Tearing through the screams

Then silence
Deathly silence

And the drip, drip
Drip

12/1/00 - Kenny A. Chaffin

badgoodDeb · 11-08-2010, 06:56 PM

are there vampires in that one?

kennyc · 11-08-2010, 07:00 PM

Quote:

Originally Posted by badgoodDeb

are there vampires in that one?

If you want them.

badgoodDeb · 11-09-2010, 02:27 PM

Or maybe a dog chasing a rabbit (or something).

Vampires was due to the time of year! (Halloween and all.....)

GeoffC · 11-10-2010, 06:34 AM

Rough draft ....

there they stood so proud
defiant unto the crowd
they faced them down
grimly visaged
loud in voice
tattooed
arm gestures flayed
slapped knees and thighs
shot terror with their eyes

Awed by the Haka
with lashings of tongue!

opponents they stood
compete they could not
but at least they did not try to dance
the Morris Dance
in response.

never mind, they say
if it's not 'the ticket'
there is always ...
cricket!

[Following the recent England - All Blacks Rugby match]

kennyc · 11-10-2010, 07:24 AM

Quote:

Originally Posted by GeoffC

Rough draft ....

there they stood so proud
defiant unto the crowd
they faced them down
grimly visaged
loud in voice
tattooed
arm gestures flayed
slapped knees and thighs
shot terror with their eyes

Awed by the Haka!

opponents they stood
compete they could not
but at least they did not try to dance
the Morris Dance
in response.

never mind, they say
if it's not 'the ticket'
there is always ...
cricket!

[Following the recent England - All Blacks Rugby match]

Love it!

GeoffC · 11-10-2010, 08:56 AM

Thanks - edited with an extra line

Vandy · 11-10-2010, 01:25 PM

Hello, All.

I've spent the last few days reading through this thread and I must say that I am VERY IMPRESSED with the writing talent of the contributing members. Your styles, word choices, etc. build such wonderful images in my mind as I read your work. I must say it is certainly wonderful and compelling eye candy.

I, myself, have been writing prose, poetry and short stories since I was a junior in my high school American Literature class in 1967. We were given an assignment to write a poem on a given subject. I enjoy writing it so much that I've continued writing.

I don't have any of my work with me (in work) but I'll gather together some examples and try and start posting them over time.

Again, thanks to all who have taken the time to share a bit of themselves by posting their writing and allow themselves to become vulnerable to others.

Regards,

GeoffC · 11-10-2010, 01:40 PM

Thanks

Joebill · 11-10-2010, 07:12 PM

you're welcome.

Vandy · 11-10-2010, 07:33 PM

Hey, All.

I thought I'd start posting some of my work. I'm not going to bother posting in chronological order -- rather, just post "as they come". I will always encourage and solicite constructive criticism of my work. Mind, I said constructive. Negative criticism doesn't do anyone any good and can actually hinder the review of a piece as well as it no use tothe author at all.

My mother died in July of 2003 in Tulsa, OK USA. I was fortunate enough to fly out to see her the day she died and spend a wonderful day with her. This piece "kicked" around in my head for a couple of years before I could put it to paper. It was another year before I coud share it with folks.

"Hello, Mom"

by Gary W. Vanderbur
© August 14, 2006
Write Naturally Publishing House
... a division of VAN Enterprises

As I entered her room, a white-hot mix of emotions coursed through me.
I took her hand, leaned over and kissed her.

"Hello, Mom."

She squeezed my hand and smiled.

"Hello, Son."

Sitting down, I couldn't take my eyes off her.
The memories of a lifetime bubbled up unchecked.

All the good,
All the bad,
All the happy,
All the sad.

We sat quietly, holding hands, our eyes speaking volumes between us.

"I love you, Mom"

"I love you, too, son."

What a pleasant afternoon we had.

The call came around nine that evening.

One by one, we met in her room and took our turns saying goodbye.

I took her hand, leaned over and kissed her.

"Goodbye, Mom. I love you."

How I yearned for her to squeeze my hand and smile.

"Goodbye, son. I love you, too."

This last piece is my "signature" piece -- that is, the piece that I believe defines my personality and myself the best. I use the last line as part of my e-mail signature.

Postscript

by Gary W. Vanderbur
© May 29, 1980
Write Naturally Publishing House
... a division of VAN Enterprises

I come upon you, brave and bold,
And reach my mind out for you to hold.
Think and wonder on what you read.
Dissect and strip it, if you've the need.
But in the end you will see,
You is you and me is me.

I hope you've enjoyed these two pieces. I'll post more as time goes on. Y'all have a great day!

Regards,

kennyc · 11-10-2010, 08:28 PM

Great work Vandy, I particularly like the goodbye to your mother poem. Handled very well.

kennyc · 11-10-2010, 08:30 PM

Since Vandy shared his, here is my goodbye to my mother poem:

Mama's Grave

When everyone else had gone away
I stood and watched the men --
grave-diggers, the coverer-uppers.

They hung back giving space
in the tree shrouded graveyard
because they'd seen it before.

My need to be there -- alone, the last,
the oldest son's goodbye. I bent
and scooped the dry clodded earth

Rolling it 'round in my hand.
I dropped it carefully clump by clump
as the men stood silently by.

I heard each thump, each sound, each tap
on the silver-gray lidded box echo inside,
a hollow sound, a knocking at the door.

1/19/01 - Kenny A. Chaffin

(Published July 2001 Poet & Writer Contest Winner)

GeoffC · 11-11-2010, 05:06 AM

words fail me, so

will suffice for you both.

Thanks for those poems that represent such personal memories in your souls.

11-10-2010, 06:34 AM	#906
GeoffC Chocolate Grasshopper ... Posts: 27,599 Karma: 20821184 Join Date: Mar 2008 Location: Scotland Device: Muse HD , Cybook Gen3 , Pocketbook 302 (Black) , Nexus 10: wife has PW	Rough draft .... there they stood so proud defiant unto the crowd they faced them down grimly visaged loud in voice tattooed arm gestures flayed slapped knees and thighs shot terror with their eyes Awed by the Haka with lashings of tongue! opponents they stood compete they could not but at least they did not try to dance the Morris Dance in response. never mind, they say if it's not 'the ticket' there is always ... cricket! [Following the recent England - All Blacks Rugby match] Last edited by GeoffC; 11-10-2010 at 08:57 AM. Reason: I forgot the tongue :eek:

11-10-2010, 01:25 PM	#909
Vandy ...always be humble. Posts: 116 Karma: 505917 Join Date: Sep 2010 Location: Fort Myers, FL USA Device: iPhone 5s, iPod Touch 3rd Gen, Kindle 3 WiFi, Kindle Fire	VANDY's checking in... Hello, All. I've spent the last few days reading through this thread and I must say that I am VERY IMPRESSED with the writing talent of the contributing members. Your styles, word choices, etc. build such wonderful images in my mind as I read your work. I must say it is certainly wonderful and compelling eye candy. I, myself, have been writing prose, poetry and short stories since I was a junior in my high school American Literature class in 1967. We were given an assignment to write a poem on a given subject. I enjoy writing it so much that I've continued writing. I don't have any of my work with me (in work) but I'll gather together some examples and try and start posting them over time. Again, thanks to all who have taken the time to share a bit of themselves by posting their writing and allow themselves to become vulnerable to others. Regards, Last edited by Vandy; 11-11-2010 at 08:47 AM.

11-10-2010, 07:33 PM	#912
Vandy ...always be humble. Posts: 116 Karma: 505917 Join Date: Sep 2010 Location: Fort Myers, FL USA Device: iPhone 5s, iPod Touch 3rd Gen, Kindle 3 WiFi, Kindle Fire	Vandy's first two poetry posts Hey, All. I thought I'd start posting some of my work. I'm not going to bother posting in chronological order -- rather, just post "as they come". I will always encourage and solicite constructive criticism of my work. Mind, I said constructive. Negative criticism doesn't do anyone any good and can actually hinder the review of a piece as well as it no use tothe author at all. My mother died in July of 2003 in Tulsa, OK USA. I was fortunate enough to fly out to see her the day she died and spend a wonderful day with her. This piece "kicked" around in my head for a couple of years before I could put it to paper. It was another year before I coud share it with folks. "Hello, Mom" by Gary W. Vanderbur © August 14, 2006 Write Naturally Publishing House ... a division of VAN Enterprises As I entered her room, a white-hot mix of emotions coursed through me. I took her hand, leaned over and kissed her. "Hello, Mom." She squeezed my hand and smiled. "Hello, Son." Sitting down, I couldn't take my eyes off her. The memories of a lifetime bubbled up unchecked. All the good, All the bad, All the happy, All the sad. We sat quietly, holding hands, our eyes speaking volumes between us. "I love you, Mom" "I love you, too, son." What a pleasant afternoon we had. The call came around nine that evening. One by one, we met in her room and took our turns saying goodbye. I took her hand, leaned over and kissed her. "Goodbye, Mom. I love you." How I yearned for her to squeeze my hand and smile. "Goodbye, son. I love you, too." This last piece is my "signature" piece -- that is, the piece that I believe defines my personality and myself the best. I use the last line as part of my e-mail signature. Postscript by Gary W. Vanderbur © May 29, 1980 Write Naturally Publishing House ... a division of VAN Enterprises I come upon you, brave and bold, And reach my mind out for you to hold. Think and wonder on what you read. Dissect and strip it, if you've the need. But in the end you will see, You is you and me is me. I hope you've enjoyed these two pieces. I'll post more as time goes on. Y'all have a great day! Regards, Last edited by Vandy; 11-11-2010 at 08:51 AM.

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11-06-2010, 09:32 AM	#902
kennyc The Dank Side of the Moon Posts: 35,907 Karma: 119230421 Join Date: Sep 2009 Location: Denver, CO Device: Kindle2; Kindle Fire	Here's an old one. I just ran across: *In the Evening* Bitch white trace Tearing through the screams Then silence Deathly silence And the drip, drip Drip 12/1/00 - Kenny A. Chaffin

11-08-2010, 06:56 PM	#903
badgoodDeb Grand Sorcerer Posts: 8,551 Karma: 64462893 Join Date: Jan 2008 Location: Harrisburg outskirts Device: Palms, K1-4s, iPads, iPhones, KV, KO1	are there vampires in that one?

11-09-2010, 02:27 PM	#905
badgoodDeb Grand Sorcerer Posts: 8,551 Karma: 64462893 Join Date: Jan 2008 Location: Harrisburg outskirts Device: Palms, K1-4s, iPads, iPhones, KV, KO1	Or maybe a dog chasing a rabbit (or something). Vampires was due to the time of year! (Halloween and all.....)

11-10-2010, 08:56 AM	#908
GeoffC Chocolate Grasshopper ... Posts: 27,599 Karma: 20821184 Join Date: Mar 2008 Location: Scotland Device: Muse HD , Cybook Gen3 , Pocketbook 302 (Black) , Nexus 10: wife has PW	Thanks - edited with an extra line

11-10-2010, 01:40 PM	#910
GeoffC Chocolate Grasshopper ... Posts: 27,599 Karma: 20821184 Join Date: Mar 2008 Location: Scotland Device: Muse HD , Cybook Gen3 , Pocketbook 302 (Black) , Nexus 10: wife has PW	Thanks

11-10-2010, 07:12 PM	#911
Joebill Fanatic Posts: 517 Karma: 459442 Join Date: Jan 2010 Location: Alpha Centauri's Library of Alexandria Device: Pandigital Novel	you're welcome.

11-10-2010, 08:28 PM	#913
kennyc The Dank Side of the Moon Posts: 35,907 Karma: 119230421 Join Date: Sep 2009 Location: Denver, CO Device: Kindle2; Kindle Fire	Great work Vandy, I particularly like the goodbye to your mother poem. Handled very well.

11-10-2010, 08:30 PM	#914
kennyc The Dank Side of the Moon Posts: 35,907 Karma: 119230421 Join Date: Sep 2009 Location: Denver, CO Device: Kindle2; Kindle Fire	Since Vandy shared his, here is my goodbye to my mother poem: *Mama's Grave* When everyone else had gone away I stood and watched the men -- grave-diggers, the coverer-uppers. They hung back giving space in the tree shrouded graveyard because they'd seen it before. My need to be there -- alone, the last, the oldest son's goodbye. I bent and scooped the dry clodded earth Rolling it 'round in my hand. I dropped it carefully clump by clump as the men stood silently by. I heard each thump, each sound, each tap on the silver-gray lidded box echo inside, a hollow sound, a knocking at the door. 1/19/01 - Kenny A. Chaffin (Published July 2001 Poet & Writer Contest Winner)

11-11-2010, 05:06 AM	#915
GeoffC Chocolate Grasshopper ... Posts: 27,599 Karma: 20821184 Join Date: Mar 2008 Location: Scotland Device: Muse HD , Cybook Gen3 , Pocketbook 302 (Black) , Nexus 10: wife has PW	words fail me, so will suffice for you both. Thanks for those poems that represent such personal memories in your souls.

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