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GeoffC · 10-23-2010, 08:15 AM

Weaving a Life

and so time marches, into the unknown;
whilst behind a past, intimately known
remains truly, ones own.

tempus fugit, dragging us along;
leaving behind an after-burn, and a song
that drifts on in its wake.

look ahead, to the future;
harken to the past, sutured
only in a mirror of backward glances.

on walkway of roads, a map yet to tread,
walking on tendrils of a open thread,
that weaves itself into
a tapestry of life.

kennyc · 10-23-2010, 08:23 AM

Wonderful!

Joebill · 10-23-2010, 09:16 PM

time after time

[ This song ( 'Time after Time' by Cyndi Lauper ) keeps digging at me, to write something. I have written several poems with this as the background song. It is like several fiction stories I have read over the years. Of people who knew each other in previous lives, and they don't recognize each other.]

I remember friends from long ago,
I wonder, do they remember me ?
Some I have fogotten their names,
memories fade away,
Oh, to remember the ones,
who I had fun with.

Driving over in that old junky car,
for a milkshake, a burger, and fries.

I looked on Google maps at the old town,
no longer the way it was, new stores,
even some of the sidewalks,
have changed.

But sometimes late at night,
I'll dream of my best bud and I,
driving over to the Dairy Queen,
to see if anyone we know is there,
but they are gone,
some died in Viet Nam,
most moved away,
I still think of them,
time after time,
like ships missing each other,
in the night and fog.

Time after Time.

[ exit ]

The other songs that haunt at me are: the intro music to 'Ghost in the Shell' 1st gig Anime episodes and the end music for Dot hack//sign. These are well written. And they reach out and grab my attention.

It took me hearing one of the Ghost in the Shell songs, those soft quiet bells. Soetikes, you have to listen to the soft and quiet bits of a song to get it. I'm not sure I get it at all.

kennyc · 10-23-2010, 09:21 PM

Wonderful JoeBill one small typo looks like:

I still thing of them,
time after time,

I still think of them,
time after time,

That is a wonderful song! Wonderful!

"Some died in Viet Nam" great placement/phrasing

Joebill · 10-23-2010, 09:25 PM

Yup, typo, all fixed.

Thanks !

Rather more difficult to write and post than I first figured on. I didn't spell check nor read it over too much, I might have deleted it and not posted. Brings up some raw memories.

kennyc · 10-23-2010, 09:26 PM

I know exactly what you mean! It's all good!

I have a couple along those lines that I just can't quite get right...keep trying to finish them...

Joebill · 10-23-2010, 09:31 PM

Probably just as raw feelings as this one, about an air crew lost at sea. I was on the the Navy destroyer sent to look for survivors.

https://www.mobileread.com/forums/sho...light=lost+sea

recluse · 10-24-2010, 12:36 AM

Things Under Attack

Paisley slacks
Fatty snacks
Exposed butt cracks
ABBA soundtracks
Obscene bric a brac

Dedicated to kennyc

kennyc · 10-24-2010, 06:47 AM

Hee-Hee!

GeoffC · 10-24-2010, 07:54 AM

is it raining hard
on the hills
the plain
and the yard,
do the flowers grow?
those with petals
and those that wash
their way to the sea.

are the gales blowing
on the hills
the plain
and o'er the seas,
do the millstones turn?
those that grind the corn
and those that weigh
upon our necks so heavily.

is it raining hard
and are the gales blowing?

kennyc · 10-24-2010, 08:16 AM

Do the poems flow?

Wonderful Geoff!

GeoffC · 10-24-2010, 08:24 AM

Thanks Kenny, and yes it seems they do (at the moment) .... though for how much longer I dinnae ken ....

the wall appears to be approaching.

kennyc · 10-24-2010, 08:34 AM

Always the way, eh? I'm working on a few, but after that "spurt" of three on Friday none more yet....

GeoffC · 10-24-2010, 08:49 AM

Yes it does seem so.

My store of WIPs has gone down rapidly during the past few days.

montsnmags · 10-24-2010, 11:40 PM

This is an older work, that still buzzes around my head, dissatisfied. If it looks like it takes a small leaflet from Ozymandias, that's because Percy's poem is one of my favourites, and so it does (I've another, more directly copying some of that work, in a hopefully humourous fashion, somewhere around here).

Fidelity to Tyrants

The data and divine allege
inscribed along foundation's edge
are truths that stand beyond remand
(but they were writ in shifting sand)

Archaic, pharaonic pride
and power-addled dogma hide
that broken stones and muddy clods
inter the bones of fallen gods

Cheers,
Marc

10-23-2010, 09:16 PM	#858
Joebill Fanatic Posts: 517 Karma: 459442 Join Date: Jan 2010 Location: Alpha Centauri's Library of Alexandria Device: Pandigital Novel	time after time [ This song ( 'Time after Time' by Cyndi Lauper ) keeps digging at me, to write something. I have written several poems with this as the background song. It is like several fiction stories I have read over the years. Of people who knew each other in previous lives, and they don't recognize each other.] I remember friends from long ago, I wonder, do they remember me ? Some I have fogotten their names, memories fade away, Oh, to remember the ones, who I had fun with. Driving over in that old junky car, for a milkshake, a burger, and fries. I looked on Google maps at the old town, no longer the way it was, new stores, even some of the sidewalks, have changed. But sometimes late at night, I'll dream of my best bud and I, driving over to the Dairy Queen, to see if anyone we know is there, but they are gone, some died in Viet Nam, most moved away, I still think of them, time after time, like ships missing each other, in the night and fog. Time after Time. [ exit ] The other songs that haunt at me are: the intro music to 'Ghost in the Shell' 1st gig Anime episodes and the end music for Dot hack//sign. These are well written. And they reach out and grab my attention. It took me hearing one of the Ghost in the Shell songs, those soft quiet bells. Soetikes, you have to listen to the soft and quiet bits of a song to get it. I'm not sure I get it at all. Last edited by Joebill; 10-23-2010 at 09:23 PM. Reason: typo

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10-23-2010, 08:15 AM	#856
GeoffC Chocolate Grasshopper ... Posts: 27,599 Karma: 20821184 Join Date: Mar 2008 Location: Scotland Device: Muse HD , Cybook Gen3 , Pocketbook 302 (Black) , Nexus 10: wife has PW	*Weaving a Life* and so time marches, into the unknown; whilst behind a past, intimately known remains truly, ones own. tempus fugit, dragging us along; leaving behind an after-burn, and a song that drifts on in its wake. look ahead, to the future; harken to the past, sutured only in a mirror of backward glances. on walkway of roads, a map yet to tread, walking on tendrils of a open thread, that weaves itself into a tapestry of life.

10-23-2010, 08:23 AM	#857
kennyc The Dank Side of the Moon Posts: 35,907 Karma: 119230421 Join Date: Sep 2009 Location: Denver, CO Device: Kindle2; Kindle Fire	Wonderful!

10-23-2010, 09:21 PM	#859
kennyc The Dank Side of the Moon Posts: 35,907 Karma: 119230421 Join Date: Sep 2009 Location: Denver, CO Device: Kindle2; Kindle Fire	Wonderful JoeBill one small typo looks like: I still thing of them, time after time, I still think of them, time after time, That is a wonderful song! Wonderful! "Some died in Viet Nam" great placement/phrasing

10-23-2010, 09:25 PM	#860
Joebill Fanatic Posts: 517 Karma: 459442 Join Date: Jan 2010 Location: Alpha Centauri's Library of Alexandria Device: Pandigital Novel	Yup, typo, all fixed. Thanks ! Rather more difficult to write and post than I first figured on. I didn't spell check nor read it over too much, I might have deleted it and not posted. Brings up some raw memories.

10-23-2010, 09:26 PM	#861
kennyc The Dank Side of the Moon Posts: 35,907 Karma: 119230421 Join Date: Sep 2009 Location: Denver, CO Device: Kindle2; Kindle Fire	I know exactly what you mean! It's all good! I have a couple along those lines that I just can't quite get right...keep trying to finish them...

10-23-2010, 09:31 PM	#862
Joebill Fanatic Posts: 517 Karma: 459442 Join Date: Jan 2010 Location: Alpha Centauri's Library of Alexandria Device: Pandigital Novel	Probably just as raw feelings as this one, about an air crew lost at sea. I was on the the Navy destroyer sent to look for survivors. https://www.mobileread.com/forums/sho...light=lost+sea

10-24-2010, 12:36 AM	#863
recluse Banned Posts: 3,724 Karma: 535488 Join Date: Feb 2010 Location: the Mortuary Device: Kindle 2	Things Under Attack Paisley slacks Fatty snacks Exposed butt cracks ABBA soundtracks Obscene bric a brac Dedicated to kennyc

10-24-2010, 06:47 AM	#864
kennyc The Dank Side of the Moon Posts: 35,907 Karma: 119230421 Join Date: Sep 2009 Location: Denver, CO Device: Kindle2; Kindle Fire	Hee-Hee!

10-24-2010, 07:54 AM	#865
GeoffC Chocolate Grasshopper ... Posts: 27,599 Karma: 20821184 Join Date: Mar 2008 Location: Scotland Device: Muse HD , Cybook Gen3 , Pocketbook 302 (Black) , Nexus 10: wife has PW	is it raining hard on the hills the plain and the yard, do the flowers grow? those with petals and those that wash their way to the sea. are the gales blowing on the hills the plain and o'er the seas, do the millstones turn? those that grind the corn and those that weigh upon our necks so heavily. is it raining hard and are the gales blowing?

10-24-2010, 08:16 AM	#866
kennyc The Dank Side of the Moon Posts: 35,907 Karma: 119230421 Join Date: Sep 2009 Location: Denver, CO Device: Kindle2; Kindle Fire	Do the poems flow? Wonderful Geoff!

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10-24-2010, 08:24 AM	#867
GeoffC Chocolate Grasshopper ... Posts: 27,599 Karma: 20821184 Join Date: Mar 2008 Location: Scotland Device: Muse HD , Cybook Gen3 , Pocketbook 302 (Black) , Nexus 10: wife has PW	Thanks Kenny, and yes it seems they do (at the moment) .... though for how much longer I dinnae ken .... the wall appears to be approaching.

10-24-2010, 08:34 AM	#868
kennyc The Dank Side of the Moon Posts: 35,907 Karma: 119230421 Join Date: Sep 2009 Location: Denver, CO Device: Kindle2; Kindle Fire	Always the way, eh? I'm working on a few, but after that "spurt" of three on Friday none more yet....

10-24-2010, 08:49 AM	#869
GeoffC Chocolate Grasshopper ... Posts: 27,599 Karma: 20821184 Join Date: Mar 2008 Location: Scotland Device: Muse HD , Cybook Gen3 , Pocketbook 302 (Black) , Nexus 10: wife has PW	Yes it does seem so. My store of WIPs has gone down rapidly during the past few days.

10-24-2010, 11:40 PM	#870
montsnmags Grand Sorcerer Posts: 10,155 Karma: 4632658 Join Date: Nov 2007 Device: none	This is an older work, that still buzzes around my head, dissatisfied. If it looks like it takes a small leaflet from Ozymandias, that's because Percy's poem is one of my favourites, and so it does (I've another, more directly copying some of that work, in a hopefully humourous fashion, somewhere around here). Fidelity to Tyrants The data and divine allege inscribed along foundation's edge are truths that stand beyond remand (but they were writ in shifting sand) Archaic, pharaonic pride and power-addled dogma hide that broken stones and muddy clods inter the bones of fallen gods Cheers, Marc