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My reaction in reading this thread is to think it's probably a truism that the better the writer, the more likely he is to believe there's always room for improvement.
I'm also reminded of a story about Thomas Mann, who initially objected to Knopf's retitling his Lotte im Weimar as The Beloved Returns, rather than using the direct translation. When he was told that Americans would be less likely to buy a book if they were uncertain how to pronounce the two key words in the title, he immediately withdrew his objection. |
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A reader of the novella said he/she would give me feedback and I sort of hinted that I already knew she would say it would be good if I reigned it in a bit. The reader actually responded saying that the style was actually enjoyable and that I didn't need to reign it in, in this regard, at all. Again, the novella seems to be pretty polarizing. Thanks for the response. - David Last edited by David910; 07-23-2015 at 12:25 PM. |
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Oy. You have a glaring grammatical error and a spelling error (repeated) in the above. It doesn't fill the gentle reader with confidence.
OK. You've said, several times, that you wrote the exact story you wanted and that it's perfect as is and can't be improved. There it is, then. Carry on. But since you refer to a three-star and a four-star rating as affirmation, I'm going for the reality check. Aside from any stylistic issues (you say style, other posters say just wrong), I think the story is quite bad. I read the preview and it's preposterous, frankly. A worker in a homeless shelter decides on her own authority to place a stray child who just showed up in a foster home? Are you serious? What about the police? What about child welfare? Is this an alternative universe and it's just not apparent yet? Because this is not how this world works. Even if I thought your style the equivalent of Proust's, I would call foul. |
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Hope this clears it up. I'll re-read the description and see if it's unclear in this regard. Thanks. - David |
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Just, no. The first thing the shelter worker would do is call the police.
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However, I want to thank you for your thoughts regarding this part of the story. - David |
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