Nighthawks at the Diner (a new suggested writing thread) - Page 4

zelda_pinwheel · 08-19-2009, 08:39 PM

i can't help it, it's like a drug. i finished dead pigeons last night and it was brilliant (did i mention *that* ? really, i loved it. worthy of hammett.), and i didn't want to leave that universe, so i'm just biding my time for more moejoe...

Moejoe · 08-19-2009, 08:48 PM

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Originally Posted by zelda_pinwheel

i can't help it, it's like a drug. i finished dead pigeons last night and it was brilliant (did i mention *that* ? really, i loved it. worthy of hammett.), and i didn't want to leave that universe, so i'm just biding my time for more moejoe...

Here's a little sneaky peak of Beneath a Bloodshot Moon then (I'm hoping Friday night release, but I've got to say it could be next week depending).

Quote:

"Admiring the artwork are we, Mr. Finch?"

I shifted my gaze from the painting to the man and back again. My eyebrows wrinkled with confusion.

Steinbeck cocked his head in puzzlement as he looked at the picture. He didn't have eyebrows to wrinkle.

The man in the painting was at least six feet with a grease slick of dark black hair. He was slim with a jutting jaw and a perfect nose.

Krain was none of those things. Not even close.

I wanted to laugh. All the stories I'd heard, all the lead-up and he turned out to be a tubby little man with a cat cradled in his arms.

Cute.

Steinbeck didn't think any of this was cute. As soon as he saw that cat, he took his fighting stance. Hair raised along the scruff of his neck, teeth bared.

"Your animal, Mr. Finch, is disturbing Murak," he said and as slow as you like, stroked the hairless Siamese the wrong way.

The skin bunched up like the wrinkles in an unmade bed.

I winced.

"You called your cat, Murak?"

zelda_pinwheel · 08-19-2009, 08:51 PM

excellent !! thank you !!!! (of course, now i'm even more eager for the whole thing !

no pressure, you know, and all that...

)

Moejoe · 08-19-2009, 10:01 PM

Okay, so here's the visual map I'm using while I write, which I thought might be interesting to some

Moe The Cat · 08-19-2009, 10:12 PM

Nice map! You should include it in the finished collection, as a visual table of contents.

Moejoe · 08-19-2009, 10:28 PM

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Originally Posted by Moe The Cat

Nice map! You should include it in the finished collection, as a visual table of contents.

It would probably be illegal, or break some stupid law, although I have posted it on my blog, so who knows where it falls law-wise

Moe The Cat · 08-19-2009, 10:29 PM

Oh, yeah ... didn't think of that. Well, just a thought ... feel free to dismiss it.

Moejoe · 08-19-2009, 10:31 PM

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Originally Posted by Moe The Cat

Oh, yeah ... didn't think of that. Well, just a thought ... feel free to dismiss it.

I'd love to put it in, but I have no idea where I stand on that front

I wonder if there's some sneaky copyright thing that I can get away with it because I'm not selling aything

I'll have to look into it

Moejoe · 08-20-2009, 02:32 AM

Here's the cover design I've been working on

dreams · 08-20-2009, 03:33 AM

I like the visual map for your stories.

What a great idea for keeping on track.
The cover is great. I like the color and car for that olden days feel... just me, but I think your name should be all together. I was a bit confused by the jumble of letters even though I knew what it was. (just a comment from an older generation point of view

)

Moejoe · 08-20-2009, 03:52 AM

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Originally Posted by dreams

I like the visual map for your stories.

What a great idea for keeping on track.
The cover is great. I like the color and car for that olden days feel... just me, but I think your name should be all together. I was a bit confused by the jumble of letters even though I knew what it was. (just a comment from an older generation point of view

)

I'm just playing with typography at the moment to create a kind of 'look-twice to read' title for Hoppersville, also the text is disjointed in a way that the stories are...I think

You're right about the author name being on one line though, I've changed that in subsequent versions

Moejoe · 08-20-2009, 04:54 AM

I think I'm getting closer to 'final' with this one

dreams · 08-20-2009, 05:26 AM

I like

**Now off to bed for me**

Moejoe · 08-24-2009, 02:13 AM

First story released into the wild @ http://www.feedbooks.com/userbook/7215

Blog post here: http://pauljohnlyon.wordpress.com/20...-1-nighthawks/

Click on image in first post for download too

This is a tad spooky Zee, so fair warning

dreams · 08-24-2009, 02:42 AM

Ah ha, just walked by the laptop and glanced at the forum spy and saw your post!! Downloaded and may just have to start it before work tomorrow.

08-19-2009, 10:01 PM	#49
Moejoe Banned Posts: 5,100 Karma: 72193 Join Date: Feb 2009 Location: South of the Border Device: Coffin	Okay, so here's the visual map I'm using while I write, which I thought might be interesting to some Attached Thumbnails

08-20-2009, 02:32 AM	#54
Moejoe Banned Posts: 5,100 Karma: 72193 Join Date: Feb 2009 Location: South of the Border Device: Coffin	Sneaky Peak Here's the cover design I've been working on Attached Thumbnails

08-20-2009, 03:33 AM	#55
dreams It's about the umbrella Posts: 25,112 Karma: 56250158 Join Date: Jan 2009 Device: Sony 505\| K Fire \| KK 3G+Wi-Fi \| iPhone 3Gs \|Vista 32-bit Hm Prem w/FF	I like the visual map for your stories. What a great idea for keeping on track. The cover is great. I like the color and car for that olden days feel... just me, but I think your name should be all together. I was a bit confused by the jumble of letters even though I knew what it was. (just a comment from an older generation point of view)

08-20-2009, 04:54 AM	#57
Moejoe Banned Posts: 5,100 Karma: 72193 Join Date: Feb 2009 Location: South of the Border Device: Coffin	I think I'm getting closer to 'final' with this one Attached Thumbnails

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08-19-2009, 08:39 PM	#46
zelda_pinwheel zeldinha zippy zeldissima Posts: 27,827 Karma: 921169 Join Date: Dec 2007 Location: Paris, France Device: eb1150 & is that a nook in her pocket, or she just happy to see you?	i can't help it, it's like a drug. i finished dead pigeons last night and it was brilliant (did i mention that ? really, i loved it. worthy of hammett.), and i didn't want to leave that universe, so i'm just biding my time for more moejoe...

08-19-2009, 08:51 PM	#48
zelda_pinwheel zeldinha zippy zeldissima Posts: 27,827 Karma: 921169 Join Date: Dec 2007 Location: Paris, France Device: eb1150 & is that a nook in her pocket, or she just happy to see you?	excellent !! thank you !!!! (of course, now i'm even more eager for the whole thing ! no pressure, you know, and all that... )

08-19-2009, 10:12 PM	#50
Moe The Cat Bear Melt Posts: 919 Karma: 5433051 Join Date: Jul 2008 Location: Toronto Device: Google Pixel 6, Moto G9 Power (both with Fbreader) & Kindle PW2	Nice map! You should include it in the finished collection, as a visual table of contents.

08-19-2009, 10:29 PM	#52
Moe The Cat Bear Melt Posts: 919 Karma: 5433051 Join Date: Jul 2008 Location: Toronto Device: Google Pixel 6, Moto G9 Power (both with Fbreader) & Kindle PW2	Oh, yeah ... didn't think of that. Well, just a thought ... feel free to dismiss it.

08-20-2009, 05:26 AM	#58
dreams It's about the umbrella Posts: 25,112 Karma: 56250158 Join Date: Jan 2009 Device: Sony 505\| K Fire \| KK 3G+Wi-Fi \| iPhone 3Gs \|Vista 32-bit Hm Prem w/FF	I like Now off to bed for me

08-24-2009, 02:13 AM	#59
Moejoe Banned Posts: 5,100 Karma: 72193 Join Date: Feb 2009 Location: South of the Border Device: Coffin	First story released into the wild @ http://www.feedbooks.com/userbook/7215 Blog post here: http://pauljohnlyon.wordpress.com/20...-1-nighthawks/ Click on image in first post for download too This is a tad spooky Zee, so fair warning

08-24-2009, 02:42 AM	#60
dreams It's about the umbrella Posts: 25,112 Karma: 56250158 Join Date: Jan 2009 Device: Sony 505\| K Fire \| KK 3G+Wi-Fi \| iPhone 3Gs \|Vista 32-bit Hm Prem w/FF	Ah ha, just walked by the laptop and glanced at the forum spy and saw your post!! Downloaded and may just have to start it before work tomorrow.

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