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English isn't my native tongue, so perhaps the things I noticed are my errors, not yours, but perhaps it helps:
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There also seem to be some spelling mistakes, etc. Having an editor look over the whole thing would probably be a really good idea... The story itself is, imho, ok. Of course, it's nothing spectacular, as the basic premise has already been used more than once... Last edited by Irian; 04-06-2011 at 11:44 AM. |
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You should check out the second book Accept One, you might be in for a bit of a surprise
And no Megan Fox doesn't show up in it... Last edited by altworld; 04-06-2011 at 01:24 PM. Reason: I blame Megan Fox |
04-08-2011, 09:03 AM | #48 |
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“Hello?” Sarah called out again tapping the phone buttons, “Can anyone hear me?”
Then Sarah caught a sudden small movement out of the corner of her eyes, and she glimpsed something scuttling quickly across the floor. Instinctively she followed the movement back around the corner of the nurses’ station, and saw what at first looked like a bug move across the floor. Kneeling down she got a closer look at what was actually an unusually small crab. The strange looking creature stopped as if it was taking a good look at her. It was crab shaped with a dark blue coloring to it. The crab had one tiny pincer and one particularly large misshapen claw. Instead of a smooth shell that you would expect to see on most crabs, it shell was covered in small knots and what looked like barnacles. Sarah reached out to it; the crab-like creature scuttled back warding her off with its large claw. “What are you?” The crab-like creature continued to scuttle away from her and disappeared around the corner into the opposite corridor. Fascinated Sarah began to follow it when a familiar musty, obnoxious egg smell hit her nostrils and Sarah stopped her in her tracks suddenly filled with dread. “Where have I smelt that before?” She sniffed again the smell was even stronger, and she could hear a faint scuttling noise. Following the noise and the tracks of the retreating crab creature she turned around the corner and stopped short, her mouth and eyes went wide at the sight waiting for her. The entire corridor was filled with hundreds of the scuttling crab like creature she saw in the nurses’ station. They flowed around the frozen hospital staff like water and all seemed to be moving around aimlessly. Then as one the crab like creatures stopped and Sarah could feel a thousand beady little eyes staring at her. Feeling uneasy she took a step back bouncing off one of the inanimate staff members and lost her footing on the frozen floor and fell heavily on her bottom. The fall sent a sharp pain through her belly, making her groan. The scuttling crab creatures watched her intently and the nearest one started to move towards Sarah. She kicked it away instinctively with her foot and scuttled herself back on her hands. The creature skidded into its fellow before turning to look at her. For a moment there was total silence and then it was broken by the menacing sound of hundreds of pincers clicking. A hissing sound started to rise from the mass of crab creatures. Not wanting to see what would happen next Sarah’s feet slid on the floor as she tried to back away from the creatures. Finally finding her feet, she turned and started to run back down the corridor, hearing, rather than saw the malevolent tide of crab creatures start to scuttle after her. The Tether None Good, a gritty fantasy action adventure straight to your eReader device. Just click on the links in the signature below or the links at the beginning of this thread. Arigato, Nick Davis |
04-14-2011, 09:30 AM | #49 |
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I see the sun, omigod I see the sun!
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04-21-2011, 11:48 AM | #50 |
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...Another creature jumped out in front him, grabbing his leg causing CT to stumble and send them both sliding towards the open hole like a baseball player stealing home base. CT swung his stick around hitting the creature solidly between the eyes before they both fell screaming down the hole and landing in a hard heap at the bottom of it. Untangling himself from the frantic little creature that was clawing at his face CT half crawled, half sobbed, and stumbled toward the entrance to the Lair. His limbs weren't cooperating and the floor kept moving under him.
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The raven blacked hair guardian stepped back his clothing blackened and burned through to the skin in several places. The exposed skin on his right side was a deep glowing red.
“Are you okay Tether?” said Paul again. Regaining a little of her composure Sarah nodded, “Yes I am okay; are you okay?” “Yes Tether,” said Paul stopping and looking away in the other direction, “It is coming.” Sarah eyes went wide, she couldn’t run from it now, and she had to hope Paul could stop this creature until dawn broke. She held up the rusty metal sleeve to show Paul. “Can you break this?” said Sarah looking furtively over his shoulder, expecting the Dark to reappear any second. “Yes Tether, it is nothing but a metal seal, do you wish it broken?” said Paul showing no concern about the approaching creature. “Yes I do…” said Sarah. Paul wrapped his hand around the metal sleeve and spoke, “Effergo Iam.” The Tether, an urban fantasy action adventure novel set on the streets of Baltimore city available on the Kindle at http://www.amazon.com/dp/B003B669N2 Or the Kobo here http://www.kobobooks.com/ebook/The-T...Otg/page1.html And the Nook here http://search.barnesandnoble.com/The...2940011806032/ Or in multiple eReader formats or print here - http://alt-world.com/altworld/?page_id=2323 Arigato, Nick Davis |
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Check out The Tether, a gritty fantasy set on the streets of Baltimore on multiple eReader formats, or sample the first 17 pages here - http://alt-world.com/altworld/?page_id=2323
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05-12-2011, 09:15 AM | #53 |
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Looking for a gritty urban fantasy adventure? Then check out The Tether set on the streets of Baltimore city, where High school student Sarah Taylor is running for her life when she accidentally comes across a device of great mystical power.
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05-19-2011, 10:12 AM | #54 |
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The End of the World is Nigh!
Okay maybe it isn't but don't you want to read one of the best gritty urban fantasy adventures before shuffling off? Then check out The Tether set on the streets of Baltimore city, where High school student Sarah Taylor is running for her life when she accidentally comes across a device of great mystical power. Check out The Tether in multiple eReader formats here - http://alt-world.com/altworld/?page_id=2323 Arigato, Nick Davis |
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Well we all seemed to have survived the Rapture and now have a long weekend a head of us.
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