Poet Challenge! New Poems Only! - Page 3

GeoffC · 05-29-2009, 12:51 PM

I'll have to investigate the villanelle... It's not something I am familiar with - I just write without getting involved too much in length..

GeoffC · 05-29-2009, 12:59 PM

In the meantime, I'll invoke the Moon .....

GeoffC · 05-29-2009, 01:04 PM

Sunshine colours do fade away
as night surely follows each day.
Warming shadows paint the night
as cool blue light takes o’er our sight.

Icy blue by light of moon,
as steel pervades an endless night.
What is black and what is white, it’s too soon
as faking colours inveigle our sight.

Is light the illusion, or is it us
as we traverse an alien land
Created by no slight of hand or truss
but death of Helios by night’s hand.

GeoffC · 05-29-2009, 01:09 PM

By dearth of coffee shall we suffer
and lacking daily doses we flag.
Quickly running to a buffer.
We hate to huff and puff and nag,
So fill us up with a prince of drink
as quick as can with a saucy wink.

griffonwing · 05-29-2009, 01:35 PM

You definatley do very good work, Geoff. And whereas your coffee poem was brilliantly written of form and verse, the request for coffee was specified as "not the drink".

By the way, this is the second poem in which youve included the word "saucy". Me thinks you have something on your mind?

GeoffC · 05-29-2009, 01:53 PM

Quote:

Originally Posted by griffonwing

You definatley do very good work, Geoff. And whereas your coffee poem was brilliantly written of form and verse, the request for coffee was specified as "not the drink".

By the way, this is the second poem in which youve included the word "saucy". Me thinks you have something on your mind?

You truely flatter me kind sir ....

sorry about the coffee - I forgot that specification and will adjust accordingly - though probably not tonight.

if li'le ol' moi has sommat on me mind, it's from you two !!!!!

griffonwing · 05-29-2009, 01:57 PM

Hehehe. I am truly innocently in all this. Aren't I?

dreams · 05-29-2009, 02:54 PM

Quote:

Originally Posted by DixieGal

Now someone do one about coffee, but it can not be the drink.

You guys are so good but, I just couldn't resist when DixieGal posted the above.... It just popped into my head. So excuse the low quality and my addition to this thread

What did you say, (cough), Ee?
If you're old..?
Oh, yes, I had that malady
and was told..
Just remember,
that whenever
you have a cough, Ee
take off at a run.
If not, you'll see
It's all not a pun
and you'll always remember
THAT whenever

You have to cough, Ee!

griffonwing · 05-29-2009, 03:03 PM

Very nice

I love puns and other plays on words.

Put in a request and join this band of misfits!

DixieGal · 05-29-2009, 03:15 PM

Quote:

Originally Posted by GeoffC

In the meantime, I'll invoke the Moon .....

The mists coiled 'round the tombstones.
Shrouds of gray and black.
White white makeup and teen angst groans
Were Thursday night's soundrack.
Then the clouds cracked to reveal the moon
And the goth kids laughed and flashed their moon.

griffonwing · 05-29-2009, 03:29 PM

Hehe. cute

griffonwing · 05-29-2009, 07:31 PM

Here's an example of a villanelle. It consists of 6 stanzas, the first 5 of which are triplets, the latter being a quadruplet. In the first stanza, lines one and three are repeated alternatingly as the last lines of the following 4 triplets. The last quadruplet must use the 2 repeating lines as its final 2 lines. Also, it must be ABA rhyme scheme. Here is an example I wrote in college.

--------NECCESSARY VOYAGE-------

Going fro and to, and to and fro,
I'm eastbound on a ship against all wills.
The core of my intestines will I throw.

Hunger strikes, unfortunate, I know.
Seasick and shamed among the sea-salts riels.
Going fro and to, and to and fro.

Like clockwork does my head to portside go.
Sea-salty, sweaty air, my nostril fills.
The core of my intestines do I throw.

Now laid up in my cabin, deep and low,
And taken none to few of seasick pills,
Still going fro and to, and to and fro.

The jaunt's about to end, what do you know.
Excitement stirs inside me, full of thrills.
The core of my intestines again I throw.

The harbour lies ahead, to portside go.
And staring at the land and rolling hills,
I'm going fro and to, and to and fro.
The core of my intestines anew I throw.

---------------------

As you see, the repeated lines aren't EXACT. I only changed them slightly to better enforce the idea, or jist, of the action. It also makes it funnier. Call it artist's perogative. :P But anyway.

I'm off to the store. Gonna make a pineapple carrot cake with rum cream cheese icing. YUM.

Douglas Rhodes · 05-30-2009, 01:04 AM

Cup of Joe

If you asked me
to tell you the exact moment I lost my
innocence
I’d be hard pressed.

But,
I remember a girl,
in eighth grade,
who I barely knew.

Her name was Danielle Cofee.
She was remarkable, and looked like
Joan Jett,
to me.

I wanted so badly
to tell her;
but, she was a burnout,
and I was a jock.

Her stepfather shot her,
and I found out about it,
like everyone else,
in fifth period, from Principal Macintyre.

Twenty years later,
I still think about
how damn beautiful she was,
and what a coward
I used to be.

GeoffC · 05-30-2009, 05:13 AM

Quote:

Originally Posted by dreams

You guys are so good but, I just couldn't resist when DixieGal posted the above.... It just popped into my head. So excuse the low quality and my addition to this thread

What did you say, (cough), Ee?
If you're old..?
Oh, yes, I had that malady
and was told..
Just remember,
that whenever
you have a cough, Ee
take off at a run.
If not, you'll see
It's all not a pun
and you'll always remember
THAT whenever

You have to cough, Ee!

Cough, ee by 'eck tha beat me to it ..... yours be better than my draft....

dreams · 05-30-2009, 06:13 AM

Quote:

Originally Posted by griffonwing

Very nice

I love puns and other plays on words.
SNIP

Quote:

Originally Posted by GeoffC

Cough, ee by 'eck tha beat me to it ..... yours be better than my draft....

Thank you all (givesalittlebow).. I'll just sit back and follow the masters ....

Quote:

Originally Posted by DixieGal

Sexy, curvy, and sleek,
with a golden atomizer.
A scent, a touch, a peek,
a misty fantasizer.
Come into my bedroom,
whispers bottled French perfume.

Very Evocative...

Quote:

Originally Posted by GeoffC

You saucy minx you,
I'll take my hour, and my evil grin.
Just you wait, you,
'til I'm back ag'in.

Quote:

Originally Posted by GeoffC

Sunshine colours do fade away
as night surely follows each day.
Warming shadows paint the night
as cool blue light takes o’er our sight.
SNIP....

What a way with words you have.

Quote:

Originally Posted by griffonwing

SNIP...

I pop a cork of my dear bottled grog.
And feel it start to burn.
I swallow more, mouth gaping as a frog.
The sky begins to turn.
Too much rum can make you sick.
That what me mum has told me *hic*

Quote:

Originally Posted by Douglas Rhodes

SNIP ...

Twenty years later,
I still think about
how damn beautiful she was,
and what a coward
I used to be.

Ah, High School memories

It's fun to read the differing styles and use of words you all show. Carry on....

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05-29-2009, 12:51 PM	#31
GeoffC Chocolate Grasshopper ... Posts: 27,599 Karma: 20821184 Join Date: Mar 2008 Location: Scotland Device: Muse HD , Cybook Gen3 , Pocketbook 302 (Black) , Nexus 10: wife has PW	I'll have to investigate the villanelle... It's not something I am familiar with - I just write without getting involved too much in length..

05-29-2009, 12:59 PM	#32
GeoffC Chocolate Grasshopper ... Posts: 27,599 Karma: 20821184 Join Date: Mar 2008 Location: Scotland Device: Muse HD , Cybook Gen3 , Pocketbook 302 (Black) , Nexus 10: wife has PW	In the meantime, I'll invoke the Moon .....

05-29-2009, 01:04 PM	#33
GeoffC Chocolate Grasshopper ... Posts: 27,599 Karma: 20821184 Join Date: Mar 2008 Location: Scotland Device: Muse HD , Cybook Gen3 , Pocketbook 302 (Black) , Nexus 10: wife has PW	Sunshine colours do fade away as night surely follows each day. Warming shadows paint the night as cool blue light takes o’er our sight. Icy blue by light of moon, as steel pervades an endless night. What is black and what is white, it’s too soon as faking colours inveigle our sight. Is light the illusion, or is it us as we traverse an alien land Created by no slight of hand or truss but death of Helios by night’s hand.

05-29-2009, 01:09 PM	#34
GeoffC Chocolate Grasshopper ... Posts: 27,599 Karma: 20821184 Join Date: Mar 2008 Location: Scotland Device: Muse HD , Cybook Gen3 , Pocketbook 302 (Black) , Nexus 10: wife has PW	By dearth of coffee shall we suffer and lacking daily doses we flag. Quickly running to a buffer. We hate to huff and puff and nag, So fill us up with a prince of drink as quick as can with a saucy wink.

05-29-2009, 01:35 PM	#35
griffonwing Suave Swabby, Savvy? Posts: 1,602 Karma: 520350 Join Date: Jun 2008 Location: Harrison, ARrrr, USA - southern Ozark mountains Device: Slate Blue PEZ (Astak Pocket Pro), CVSCX-9300 Quad-band watch phone	You definatley do very good work, Geoff. And whereas your coffee poem was brilliantly written of form and verse, the request for coffee was specified as "not the drink". By the way, this is the second poem in which youve included the word "saucy". Me thinks you have something on your mind?

05-29-2009, 01:57 PM	#37
griffonwing Suave Swabby, Savvy? Posts: 1,602 Karma: 520350 Join Date: Jun 2008 Location: Harrison, ARrrr, USA - southern Ozark mountains Device: Slate Blue PEZ (Astak Pocket Pro), CVSCX-9300 Quad-band watch phone	Hehehe. I am truly innocently in all this. Aren't I?

05-29-2009, 03:03 PM	#39
griffonwing Suave Swabby, Savvy? Posts: 1,602 Karma: 520350 Join Date: Jun 2008 Location: Harrison, ARrrr, USA - southern Ozark mountains Device: Slate Blue PEZ (Astak Pocket Pro), CVSCX-9300 Quad-band watch phone	Very nice I love puns and other plays on words. Put in a request and join this band of misfits!

05-29-2009, 03:29 PM	#41
griffonwing Suave Swabby, Savvy? Posts: 1,602 Karma: 520350 Join Date: Jun 2008 Location: Harrison, ARrrr, USA - southern Ozark mountains Device: Slate Blue PEZ (Astak Pocket Pro), CVSCX-9300 Quad-band watch phone	Hehe. cute

05-29-2009, 07:31 PM	#42
griffonwing Suave Swabby, Savvy? Posts: 1,602 Karma: 520350 Join Date: Jun 2008 Location: Harrison, ARrrr, USA - southern Ozark mountains Device: Slate Blue PEZ (Astak Pocket Pro), CVSCX-9300 Quad-band watch phone	Here's an example of a villanelle. It consists of 6 stanzas, the first 5 of which are triplets, the latter being a quadruplet. In the first stanza, lines one and three are repeated alternatingly as the last lines of the following 4 triplets. The last quadruplet must use the 2 repeating lines as its final 2 lines. Also, it must be ABA rhyme scheme. Here is an example I wrote in college. --------NECCESSARY VOYAGE------- Going fro and to, and to and fro, I'm eastbound on a ship against all wills. The core of my intestines will I throw. Hunger strikes, unfortunate, I know. Seasick and shamed among the sea-salts riels. Going fro and to, and to and fro. Like clockwork does my head to portside go. Sea-salty, sweaty air, my nostril fills. The core of my intestines do I throw. Now laid up in my cabin, deep and low, And taken none to few of seasick pills, Still going fro and to, and to and fro. The jaunt's about to end, what do you know. Excitement stirs inside me, full of thrills. The core of my intestines again I throw. The harbour lies ahead, to portside go. And staring at the land and rolling hills, I'm going fro and to, and to and fro. The core of my intestines anew I throw. --------------------- As you see, the repeated lines aren't EXACT. I only changed them slightly to better enforce the idea, or jist, of the action. It also makes it funnier. Call it artist's perogative. :P But anyway. I'm off to the store. Gonna make a pineapple carrot cake with rum cream cheese icing. YUM.

05-30-2009, 01:04 AM	#43
Douglas Rhodes Connoisseur Posts: 78 Karma: 500132 Join Date: Aug 2008 Location: Akron, Ohio Device: Blackberry Storm, laptop	Cup of Joe If you asked me to tell you the exact moment I lost my innocence I’d be hard pressed. But, I remember a girl, in eighth grade, who I barely knew. Her name was Danielle Cofee. She was remarkable, and looked like Joan Jett, to me. I wanted so badly to tell her; but, she was a burnout, and I was a jock. Her stepfather shot her, and I found out about it, like everyone else, in fifth period, from Principal Macintyre. Twenty years later, I still think about how damn beautiful she was, and what a coward I used to be.

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