Releasing a chapter at a time? - Page 2

kennyc · 12-13-2012, 02:34 PM

Lies, damned lies and statistics!

jhempel24 · 12-13-2012, 02:45 PM

OMG, I KNEW I shouldn't have trusted my phones audio dictate feature when responding!!!

SADISTIC!!!

mr ploppy · 12-13-2012, 03:23 PM

I'd chain her round the neck so if she fell asleep she'd strangle herself. Or have it so tight she'd need to be standing on her toes all the time.

jhempel24 · 12-13-2012, 03:25 PM

Good idea....I'm working with the prologue now so I may add that in....I'll update the blog when it's done and see what people think of the revised version. Not much will change, but will be incorporating alot of what you had said.

and who said statisticians weren't sadistic?

jhempel24 · 12-13-2012, 04:11 PM

Okay, updated to reflect some suggestions....hopefully it works out better...all critique is welcome! Anything will help me be a better writer!

joehempel at the blogspot dot come site

mr ploppy · 12-13-2012, 05:05 PM

You repeat chained to the wall naked within a couple of sentences, and you have her laying in her own filth when she's chained upright. And her hair wouldn't smell of urine unless she was upside down.

"Show don't tell" was the most useful thing someone taught me.

(The girl stood in the darkness naked)

She shivered in the darkness (from a draught blowing across something that would be covered if she wasn't naked?).

That sort of thing. Get inside her head and describe what you feel, not what's happening to you.

jhempel24 · 12-13-2012, 06:13 PM

Thanks, that is some great advice. I will go back tonight at work and fix in my downtime. I've just got to figure out how to "show" total darkness. I don't want a draft, or light, or anything. I want there to be absolutely nothing for her senses.

I'll be back tonight.

Thank you so much for your help!!!

CHunter_Author · 03-15-2013, 01:12 AM

It's a worthy experiment. I have been trying this to unknown results. But in time I think the episodic approach will work out, especially as tablets become more popular.

crich70 · 03-15-2013, 07:13 AM

My1st thought was of that being how the classic authors that we all know (Stevenson, Dickens, etc) did it back in the day in the newspapers before they then had them printed up in novel format. So there is a precedent to it. Newspaper => Printed Novel and now Blog => ebook.

Todd Young · 03-15-2013, 08:11 AM

I wrote a couple of novels a chapter at a time with feedback from friends, and I've got to say it really helped me keep focus on what I was doing and where I was going. I didn't feel as though I could simply slack off. So I made it through my first novel and then my second, and now I seem to have no trouble getting through a novel. With self-publishing, you know it's going to be read by someone, even if it's only one person, and for me that acts as a spur to creativity.

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12-13-2012, 02:34 PM	#16
kennyc The Dank Side of the Moon Posts: 35,897 Karma: 119230421 Join Date: Sep 2009 Location: Denver, CO Device: Kindle2; Kindle Fire	Lies, damned lies and statistics!

12-13-2012, 02:45 PM	#17
jhempel24 Wizard Posts: 2,157 Karma: 7068605 Join Date: Dec 2007 Device: Amazon Kindle Paperwhite, B&N Nook Colro	OMG, I KNEW I shouldn't have trusted my phones audio dictate feature when responding!!! SADISTIC!!!

12-13-2012, 03:23 PM	#18
mr ploppy Feral Underclass Posts: 3,622 Karma: 26821535 Join Date: Jan 2010 Location: Yorkshire, tha noz Device: 2nd hand paperback	I'd chain her round the neck so if she fell asleep she'd strangle herself. Or have it so tight she'd need to be standing on her toes all the time.

12-13-2012, 03:25 PM	#19
jhempel24 Wizard Posts: 2,157 Karma: 7068605 Join Date: Dec 2007 Device: Amazon Kindle Paperwhite, B&N Nook Colro	Good idea....I'm working with the prologue now so I may add that in....I'll update the blog when it's done and see what people think of the revised version. Not much will change, but will be incorporating alot of what you had said. and who said statisticians weren't sadistic?

12-13-2012, 04:11 PM	#20
jhempel24 Wizard Posts: 2,157 Karma: 7068605 Join Date: Dec 2007 Device: Amazon Kindle Paperwhite, B&N Nook Colro	Okay, updated to reflect some suggestions....hopefully it works out better...all critique is welcome! Anything will help me be a better writer! joehempel at the blogspot dot come site

12-13-2012, 05:05 PM	#21
mr ploppy Feral Underclass Posts: 3,622 Karma: 26821535 Join Date: Jan 2010 Location: Yorkshire, tha noz Device: 2nd hand paperback	You repeat chained to the wall naked within a couple of sentences, and you have her laying in her own filth when she's chained upright. And her hair wouldn't smell of urine unless she was upside down. "Show don't tell" was the most useful thing someone taught me. (The girl stood in the darkness naked) She shivered in the darkness (from a draught blowing across something that would be covered if she wasn't naked?). That sort of thing. Get inside her head and describe what you feel, not what's happening to you.

12-13-2012, 06:13 PM	#22
jhempel24 Wizard Posts: 2,157 Karma: 7068605 Join Date: Dec 2007 Device: Amazon Kindle Paperwhite, B&N Nook Colro	Thanks, that is some great advice. I will go back tonight at work and fix in my downtime. I've just got to figure out how to "show" total darkness. I don't want a draft, or light, or anything. I want there to be absolutely nothing for her senses. I'll be back tonight. Thank you so much for your help!!!

03-15-2013, 01:12 AM	#23
CHunter_Author Zealot Posts: 118 Karma: 503896 Join Date: Jan 2011 Location: Bronx, NY Device: iPhone	It's a worthy experiment. I have been trying this to unknown results. But in time I think the episodic approach will work out, especially as tablets become more popular.

03-15-2013, 07:13 AM	#24
crich70 Grand Sorcerer Posts: 11,310 Karma: 43993832 Join Date: Feb 2010 Location: Monroe Wisconsin Device: K3, Kindle Paperwhite, Calibre, and Mobipocket for Pc (netbook)	My1st thought was of that being how the classic authors that we all know (Stevenson, Dickens, etc) did it back in the day in the newspapers before they then had them printed up in novel format. So there is a precedent to it. Newspaper => Printed Novel and now Blog => ebook.

03-15-2013, 08:11 AM	#25
Todd Young Addict Posts: 243 Karma: 1004164 Join Date: May 2011 Device: Kindle 2	I wrote a couple of novels a chapter at a time with feedback from friends, and I've got to say it really helped me keep focus on what I was doing and where I was going. I didn't feel as though I could simply slack off. So I made it through my first novel and then my second, and now I seem to have no trouble getting through a novel. With self-publishing, you know it's going to be read by someone, even if it's only one person, and for me that acts as a spur to creativity.

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