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There's one niggly one that bothers me, but if you went through it without noticing it I'm probably worrying too much: Spoiler:
Regarding the ending: BIG SPOILER - PLEASE DON'T OPEN UNTIL YOU'VE READ THE STORY: Spoiler:
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I'm not going to exclude any stories. As soon as the submitter of the story is happy with it and the suggested changes are down to a matter of taste, it's fine by me. The one thing I have found is the reason why fantasy novels tend to be long, and they tend to be series. It's fracking impossible to write short fantasy... :X At one point, I was like: "How am I going to fill 8,000 words? I'm going to need two or three or even four stories." Now I'm like: "How am I going to keep this *below* 8,000 words?" ![]() Last edited by Katsunami; 03-11-2014 at 07:32 PM. |
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When My Father 'Died' - v.1-5 uploaded.
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Hope mine remains the longest at 5,100 words (Kidding). ![]() |
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When My Father Died - v.1-5
Thanks Marlowe. Those tweaks are good.
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There's a lot of charming detail in the story, and it gets better with each revision. Graham Last edited by Graham; 03-10-2014 at 08:03 AM. |
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Just so you know: I am still around, I've just been busy on other things. I haven't had a chance to read the latest versions or edit my own story yet. It may take a couple of days for me to catch up.
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I've just posted version 0.8 of my story. I'll use version 0.9 for some edits I have planned, and then I'll post version 1.0.
The story is finished, at this point containing 7,886 words in LibreOffice. Count Pages in Calibre seems to count some stuff I didn't type myself as words as well, settling on 8,179 words. The EPUB is 19 pages long. Funny. I didn't even actively try to keep the story below 8,000 words. |
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Well, I just realised that version 0.9 doesn't need to be followed by 1.0. I can still use 0.10, 0.11, 0.101... harhar
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Graham: you've not read the work in progress, I assume? After the 0.9 edit this evening, I'll start reading the other stories. Dayum, writing this cost more time than I thought. |
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Not yet. I decided that I wanted to wait for the confirmed v1 of the stories.
If you're just tidying up overuse of crying, though, I can read your 0.9 or hold off a bit longer - whichever you'd find more useful. Graham |
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Instead of first fixing the overuse of sighing and crying and then do another editing pass, I'm just doing a full edit on version 0.8 now. There might not be a version 0.9.
Don't waste your time on version 0.1-0.8. I've been replacing entire parts of phrases with a single word, such as: "She hesitated for just a short while" -> "She hesitated momentarily." ("Momentarily" = "for just a short while", according to Google.) This technique alone dropped the word count some 50 words, and I've just edited 300 ![]() ![]() Ah, well. I will have some room to make up more story ![]() Nah; I might drop some words this way, but there -is- some other stuff that needs a bit of clarification... Last edited by Katsunami; 03-10-2014 at 02:56 PM. |
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