User Poetry - Page 7

DixieGal · 05-13-2008, 06:55 PM

M R in office cube.
Quick! The boss will be here soon.
Minimize Explorer.

Does that work?

Taylor514ce · 05-13-2008, 06:57 PM

Does it work for you? Then it works! But if you're asking for haiku advice, don't. I'm merciless.

zelda_pinwheel · 05-13-2008, 06:59 PM

Quote:

Originally Posted by mjh215

Was going to ask if we were going by "on's" or syllables. In either case I'm probably squirreled but still...

(Not user) Taylor, http://media.www.ndsmcobserver.com/m...s-928179.shtml

-MJ

i think my favorite one from that page is :

You jumped on my back
After smelling chips in my bag
I screamed like a girl

Quote:

Originally Posted by Taylor514ce

There is even an extreme form of "haiku", called minimals, that crams several words together, cleverly combining letters. One of mine:

gooseasonorouskies

Can you see the haiku hidden in that?

P.S. Zelda, mon canard... you know me so well, all my inhalations are your exhalations.

:appreciating:

mjh215 · 05-13-2008, 07:04 PM

The rules expounded
A different twist
Confirmed convention-less

-MJ

badgoodDeb · 05-14-2008, 12:59 AM

Pup murmers
Wriggles in sleep
Catching phantom squirrels

montsnmags · 05-14-2008, 01:20 AM

Plastic leaves unglued
by dust and climate control
fall; whisper "faux-ku"

zelda_pinwheel · 05-14-2008, 07:50 AM

Quote:

Originally Posted by montsnmags

Plastic leaves unglued
by dust and climate control
fall; whisper "faux-ku"

so true. a profound and moving commentary on the human condition in the XX1st century. man's inhumanity to man, and all that. the great intersidereal void inside us as we bustle through life like automatons, métro-boulot-dodo. bravissimo marc...

(how's that for a reaction hey ???)

pshrynk · 05-14-2008, 11:12 AM

parp!

pshrynk · 05-14-2008, 11:14 AM

What? How much more minimalist can you get than a four letter nonsense word with an emotion inducing punctuation? At least on this forum?

I was thinking:

L

But I have to have at least five characters and spaces apparently don't count.

GeoffC · 05-18-2008, 10:41 AM

An old one...

Without a thought the earth did roar;
Two plates once bound
for an age, or more
did slip, and unwound.

Distressed, at ocean deep
Land once level, released, now sundered.
Giants of waves no longer asleep,
Delivered ashore, wild steeds, no mere white horses; we blundered.

Galloping forth, unbridled, wanton, unchecked
All in their path
Were wrecked.
What once was, now no more.

Silence,
Force now spent;
But at deep it continued, defiant cadence.
Until another, rent
shook and earth did scream,
again.

pilotbob · 05-18-2008, 02:01 PM

A limerick....

There once was a lady from france,
who didn't have on any pants.
But here was the rub,
she sat in the tub,
with none of the bubbles askance.

Go easy on me, it was a first attempt.

BOb

Taylor514ce · 05-18-2008, 02:06 PM

A penguin dressed like a nabob
who goes by the name "pilobob"
took a stab at a verse
it could have been worse
all-in-all a very good job.

Patricia · 05-18-2008, 04:14 PM

An android, who was quite depressed,
Found poetry gave him some rest.
He wrote lots of verse,
In tanka at first,
But limericks suited him best.

zelda_pinwheel · 05-18-2008, 05:37 PM

In Paris one day late in May,
On the island we had a soirée.
But though rum made us bold,
it was far too cold,
and at 10.30 je suis rentrée.

Patricia · 05-18-2008, 05:58 PM

Good to see that you weren't struck by lightning, Zelda.

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05-13-2008, 06:55 PM	#91
DixieGal Hi There! Posts: 7,473 Karma: 2930523 Join Date: Feb 2008 Location: Ft Lauderdale Device: iPad	M R in office cube. Quick! The boss will be here soon. Minimize Explorer. Does that work?

05-13-2008, 06:57 PM	#92
Taylor514ce Actively passive. Posts: 2,042 Karma: 478376 Join Date: Feb 2008 Location: US Device: Sony PRS-505/LC	Does it work for you? Then it works! But if you're asking for haiku advice, don't. I'm merciless.

05-13-2008, 07:04 PM	#94
mjh215 Guru Posts: 988 Karma: 12653 Join Date: Apr 2008 Device: None of your business	The rules expounded A different twist Confirmed convention-less -MJ

05-14-2008, 12:59 AM	#95
badgoodDeb Grand Sorcerer Posts: 8,574 Karma: 64462893 Join Date: Jan 2008 Location: Harrisburg outskirts Device: Palms, K1-4s, iPads, iPhones, KV, KO1	Pup murmers Wriggles in sleep Catching phantom squirrels

05-14-2008, 01:20 AM	#96
montsnmags Grand Sorcerer Posts: 10,155 Karma: 4632658 Join Date: Nov 2007 Device: none	Plastic leaves unglued by dust and climate control fall; whisper "faux-ku"

05-14-2008, 11:12 AM	#98
pshrynk Beepbeep n beebeep, yeah! Posts: 11,726 Karma: 8255450 Join Date: Apr 2008 Location: La Crosse, Wisconsin, aka America's IceBox Device: iThingie, KmkII, I miss Zelda!	parp!

05-14-2008, 11:14 AM	#99
pshrynk Beepbeep n beebeep, yeah! Posts: 11,726 Karma: 8255450 Join Date: Apr 2008 Location: La Crosse, Wisconsin, aka America's IceBox Device: iThingie, KmkII, I miss Zelda!	What? How much more minimalist can you get than a four letter nonsense word with an emotion inducing punctuation? At least on this forum? I was thinking: L But I have to have at least five characters and spaces apparently don't count.

05-18-2008, 10:41 AM	#100
GeoffC Chocolate Grasshopper ... Posts: 27,599 Karma: 20821184 Join Date: Mar 2008 Location: Scotland Device: Muse HD , Cybook Gen3 , Pocketbook 302 (Black) , Nexus 10: wife has PW	An old one... Without a thought the earth did roar; Two plates once bound for an age, or more did slip, and unwound. Distressed, at ocean deep Land once level, released, now sundered. Giants of waves no longer asleep, Delivered ashore, wild steeds, no mere white horses; we blundered. Galloping forth, unbridled, wanton, unchecked All in their path Were wrecked. What once was, now no more. Silence, Force now spent; But at deep it continued, defiant cadence. Until another, rent shook and earth did scream, again.

05-18-2008, 02:01 PM	#101
pilotbob Grand Sorcerer Posts: 19,832 Karma: 11844413 Join Date: Jan 2007 Location: Tampa, FL USA Device: Kindle Touch	A limerick.... There once was a lady from france, who didn't have on any pants. But here was the rub, she sat in the tub, with none of the bubbles askance. Go easy on me, it was a first attempt. BOb

05-18-2008, 02:06 PM	#102
Taylor514ce Actively passive. Posts: 2,042 Karma: 478376 Join Date: Feb 2008 Location: US Device: Sony PRS-505/LC	A penguin dressed like a nabob who goes by the name "pilobob" took a stab at a verse it could have been worse all-in-all a very good job.

05-18-2008, 04:14 PM	#103
Patricia Reader Posts: 11,504 Karma: 8720163 Join Date: May 2007 Location: South Wales, UK Device: Sony PRS-500, PRS-505, Asus EEEpc 4G	An android, who was quite depressed, Found poetry gave him some rest. He wrote lots of verse, In tanka at first, But limericks suited him best.

05-18-2008, 05:37 PM	#104
zelda_pinwheel zeldinha zippy zeldissima Posts: 27,827 Karma: 921169 Join Date: Dec 2007 Location: Paris, France Device: eb1150 & is that a nook in her pocket, or she just happy to see you?	In Paris one day late in May, On the island we had a soirée. But though rum made us bold, it was far too cold, and at 10.30 je suis rentrée.

05-18-2008, 05:58 PM	#105
Patricia Reader Posts: 11,504 Karma: 8720163 Join Date: May 2007 Location: South Wales, UK Device: Sony PRS-500, PRS-505, Asus EEEpc 4G	Good to see that you weren't struck by lightning, Zelda.