"Unnatural Time" - Free eBook short story (Sci-Fi / Adventure)

ChupaLibro · 12-12-2010, 11:18 AM

My latest short story, "Unnatural Time", is now up for free on Smashwords.com in multiple eBook formats. Here is the blurb:

Quote:

Mr. Kite's Cavalcade of Unnatural History tours the country, presenting unusual wonders and sights, but something more sinister is at work. For Palequus and Peter, agents sent to investigate, they realize what a threat the Cavalcade is. But can a retired Grim Reaper and discharged cherub stop Mr. Kite and his plans, lest they become a curiosity of the Cavalcade, a memento of a forgotten history?

Click here to download to "Unnatural History". And as always, feedback is welcome.

caleb72 · 12-13-2010, 07:38 AM

Picked up all your short stories to read when I have some time.

Regards
Caleb

ChupaLibro · 12-13-2010, 12:41 PM

That's great to hear. I'd love to hear your thoughts when you are finished reading them.

ChupaLibro · 12-20-2010, 08:39 PM

Also, cover artist K. Woo maintains a blog here, where you can sample her other artistic wares.

caleb72 · 12-20-2010, 10:41 PM

I read the first page or so of this, but I seem to find it difficult to juggle more than one book at once.

I will be getting to it soon though.

Regards
Caleb

caleb72 · 12-26-2010, 06:27 AM

Finally got to this.

Cool little story. The only thing I was disappointed about was that this could've really been fleshed out to be a great novella.

Peter and Palequus were great characters that I'd like to know more about and I think I could have enjoyed Mr Kite's Cavalcade of Unnatural History could have been a really interesting location for a much bigger story.

Regards
Caleb

ChupaLibro · 12-26-2010, 10:53 AM

Caleb, thanks for reading the story and the honest feedback, I greatly appreciate it. I plan on doing more Palequus and Peter tales, and subsequently put them in a collection. You gave me an idea to expand "Unnatural Time"... thanks!

If you are so inclined, would you mind posting your review on the Smashwords site? I think it would be useful to potential readers, and for someone like me getting started, I would greatly appreciate it.

Thanks again and I hope you'll try my other fiction out.

caleb72 · 12-26-2010, 08:52 PM

Collected works for the two characters would be great - but it would be good to flesh them out more as characters - a bit of backstory wouldn't hurt, particularly for Peter - eg. why is he disgraced. Also would love to know why the alternate reality he experienced scared him so much.

I wrote the review on Smashwords - with some corrections as my English was shocking in my last post.

I have your other stories on my device as I'm finishing off 2010 with some short stories, so I'll have them all read by 2011.

Regards
Caleb

ChupaLibro · 01-02-2011, 06:29 PM

"Unnatural Time" is now available from B&N's website: http://search.barnesandnoble.com/Unn...unnatural+time

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12-13-2010, 07:38 AM	#2
caleb72 Indie Advocate Posts: 2,863 Karma: 18794463 Join Date: Sep 2010 Location: Melbourne, Australia Device: Kindle	Picked up all your short stories to read when I have some time. Regards Caleb

12-13-2010, 12:41 PM	#3
ChupaLibro Julio Angel Ortiz Posts: 74 Karma: 506490 Join Date: Nov 2010 Device: Kindle Fire	That's great to hear. I'd love to hear your thoughts when you are finished reading them.

12-20-2010, 08:39 PM	#4
ChupaLibro Julio Angel Ortiz Posts: 74 Karma: 506490 Join Date: Nov 2010 Device: Kindle Fire	Also, cover artist K. Woo maintains a blog here, where you can sample her other artistic wares.

12-20-2010, 10:41 PM	#5
caleb72 Indie Advocate Posts: 2,863 Karma: 18794463 Join Date: Sep 2010 Location: Melbourne, Australia Device: Kindle	I read the first page or so of this, but I seem to find it difficult to juggle more than one book at once. I will be getting to it soon though. Regards Caleb

12-26-2010, 06:27 AM	#6
caleb72 Indie Advocate Posts: 2,863 Karma: 18794463 Join Date: Sep 2010 Location: Melbourne, Australia Device: Kindle	Finally got to this. Cool little story. The only thing I was disappointed about was that this could've really been fleshed out to be a great novella. Peter and Palequus were great characters that I'd like to know more about and I think I could have enjoyed Mr Kite's Cavalcade of Unnatural History could have been a really interesting location for a much bigger story. Regards Caleb

12-26-2010, 10:53 AM	#7
ChupaLibro Julio Angel Ortiz Posts: 74 Karma: 506490 Join Date: Nov 2010 Device: Kindle Fire	Caleb, thanks for reading the story and the honest feedback, I greatly appreciate it. I plan on doing more Palequus and Peter tales, and subsequently put them in a collection. You gave me an idea to expand "Unnatural Time"... thanks! If you are so inclined, would you mind posting your review on the Smashwords site? I think it would be useful to potential readers, and for someone like me getting started, I would greatly appreciate it. Thanks again and I hope you'll try my other fiction out.

12-26-2010, 08:52 PM	#8
caleb72 Indie Advocate Posts: 2,863 Karma: 18794463 Join Date: Sep 2010 Location: Melbourne, Australia Device: Kindle	Collected works for the two characters would be great - but it would be good to flesh them out more as characters - a bit of backstory wouldn't hurt, particularly for Peter - eg. why is he disgraced. Also would love to know why the alternate reality he experienced scared him so much. I wrote the review on Smashwords - with some corrections as my English was shocking in my last post. I have your other stories on my device as I'm finishing off 2010 with some short stories, so I'll have them all read by 2011. Regards Caleb

01-02-2011, 06:29 PM	#9
ChupaLibro Julio Angel Ortiz Posts: 74 Karma: 506490 Join Date: Nov 2010 Device: Kindle Fire	"Unnatural Time" is now available from B&N's website: http://search.barnesandnoble.com/Unn...unnatural+time