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Old 06-05-2017, 10:36 AM   #31
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Originally Posted by gmw View Post
I'm sorry, Dr. Drib, but your work needs modernising:

"" exclaimed and then further , "Did you say '' or '' ?"

and at and then both * out . " " they


Now there's some expressive prose.

* sorry, couldn't find a bursting balloon


A vast improvement over the original!
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