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Old 02-27-2013, 07:41 PM   #65
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Originally Posted by ApK View Post
Perhaps I'm missing something, and I am tired, but I don't see anything especially bad about that paragraph.

Seems to convey a "Marsha Marsha Marsha!" state of mind reasonably well.
ApK, I agree with you. Now, a whole series of paragraphs in that vein would be off-putting, but that single paragraph expresses the character, and I would not edit it.
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