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Old 04-28-2011, 01:16 PM   #1043
Vandy
...always be humble.
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@caleb72 Beowulf

Well told story with great word imagery. You can almost feel the beast's breath upon your neck.

I really like the structure of your poem and your rhyming pattern is very nice.

This is really an excellent piece!


@crich70 Cupid

Your couplets work beautifully in this poem. I absolutely LOVE the story you've told. Excellent word imagery -- great humor -- wonderful flow.

Thank you for sharing thgis excellent poem.


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