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Old 08-02-2013, 01:40 AM   #9
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I did consider completely splitting in the clauses, but it doesn't read as smoothly in the paragraph that this comes from. The emotional connection is intended - he's missing his friends. I think that in the larger context the meaning is clearer. (The reader has just come from Abby's departure, and knows what is happening to Bill from a previous scene.)
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