THIS is why I need to re-edit all my work....Wow.
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He was laying in a small bed, goosedown feathers were soft against his skin.
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Just became this:
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The waking world arrived slowly, everything fading out of darkness and into the light. Senses awakened. Light blinded him. At least the bed was comfortable. Goosedown feathers played softly against his naked skin.
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One of many passive voice sentences and paragraphs that I've found so far in the 3,000 words that I've edited. Wow. I suck. It's not that bad, but not great yet either.
Apparently, when I get into stream of conscious, all my writing shifts into passive voice as I tell myself the story.