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Less abstract nekkidness.
Less nekkidness period.
More violence of a graphic nature.
Imaginary peoples inhumanity to imaginary people.
Less westerny.
Torture would be nice.
"Reservoir Dogs" stuff.
No musical numbers.
Less gibbon.
Exploding people is always appreciated.
A touch of Lovecraft would help.
I like stories with storms in them.
No vampires, werewolves, teens or faeries.
Graveyards are appreciated.
No sex.
No romance. It's unrealistic.
More actual cursing.
No horses.
Biker gangs are fun.
Hangings are great family entertainment.
No children. Don't like them.
Satanism is a nice subplot.
Killer blood drinking carrots.
A nice, long, graphic human flensing is great fun.
A subplot where a certain group of old bats get beaten boneless with a stick would be a nice bit of needed slapstick.
Have you got a headache yet? I do.
Otherwise, I think the story is swell.
You write real good, Pooh.
*BIG HUG*
Don't ever change.
But your character in the story should be taller.
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