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badgoodDeb · 06-28-2010, 10:19 PM

Okayyyy, then. You are one sick puppy! But that's a heck of a storyline.

It needs a little polishing (some sentences should be two; and some instances of "had went" should be "had gone") but it's quite a ride! More explicit gore than I prefer, but others may disagree.

Afterward -- my brain always rehashes scenes in light of the conclusion. So....

Spoiler:

And..... Unless he really has gained psychic powers

Spoiler:

06-28-2010, 10:19 PM	#20
badgoodDeb Grand Sorcerer Posts: 8,551 Karma: 64462893 Join Date: Jan 2008 Location: Harrisburg outskirts Device: Palms, K1-4s, iPads, iPhones, KV, KO1	Okayyyy, then. You are one sick puppy! But that's a heck of a storyline. It needs a little polishing (some sentences should be two; and some instances of "had went" should be "had gone") but it's quite a ride! More explicit gore than I prefer, but others may disagree. Afterward -- my brain always rehashes scenes in light of the conclusion. So.... Spoiler: How does the car chase scene & the confessional work in light of the conclusion? Protagonist sees and chases the villain. And..... Unless he really has gained psychic powers Spoiler: How can he watch Lindsay's and papa's deaths? Conclusion doesn't cover those scenes either.