[daveconifer]

Originally Posted by solomon

Thanks to your previous free offer I d/l and read this - and it is quite amusing, great light read.

Without appearing too negative, may I ask if you are self-editing? If so, you might want to consider getting a second set of eyes on the final output. There were some typo/word choices that made me (Amateur Mister Language Person) wince. Still a good read, nothing that really detracted from the story, but polishing touches that might help move you up the next rung.

Thanks again!
Richard

I'm glad you liked it. That's the first time I've heard that criticism. Can you think of any examples offhand?

Thanks!