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Originally Posted by omk3

I am one third in and enjoying it very much. I found it a little difficult to get into at first, put it gets more interesting with every page.

I found many tense and person inconsistencies throughout (I suddenly becomes they, present tense suddenly becomes past) but other than that it is very well written. I'm sending you details from what I've got till now by pm.

I was worried about the tense thing. I normally write in third person, past tense so I tended to lapse back into it as I wrote.

Thanks for the feedback.