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Originally Posted by WT Sharpe
Nice. The first part spoke of prophets without honor in their own country, the second of young men who served without the honor due. Courage and undeserved dishonor being the common thread. I'll be interested in seeing the final version and how you perhaps strengthen those links.
I would start a new paragraph beginning with the words, "And in those
hot autumn days they were not unlike the young men
chosen a decade later to fight in the jungles
and steaming tunnels on the other side of the world --".
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Thanks Tom. I'm getting input on this at the poetry site I frequent as well. I not sure where it's going to go at this point.
Much appreciated!