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Originally Posted by GeoffC
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[ had to google those names to work out what the background was ]
an emotive subject for you . and yet somehow there's little passion in the words in the way they are currently laid out . ( and I am at a loss on how to make any suggestions, at least you've said it's a first draft )
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Thanks Geoff. I'll think on it. Appreciate your input.