Hi James,
Welcome to Mobileread! If you're going to shamelessly promote your book properly, you really need to provide links and other info. e.g.
Rent a Family by James Aaron Cooke — only
$3.99 at the Amazon Kindle store!
I think you may be pricing your story a bit high. You don't seem to be an established writer, and the very plain cover (single colour background and black text) isn't enticing.
Checking out the sample (as you suggest), the formatting of the text is irregular. You have a blank line between every paragraph, but also a first line indent on some, but not all paragraphs in no apparent pattern. And the indents that are there are not all the same size. Chapter headings are just separated by space — I always like to have chapter headings at least in bold. You don't have a table of contents, either in-line in the HTML, or available the Kindle menu.
The typography could also do with tweaking — you're using hyphens (or two hyphens, irregularly) for dashes. Some people do prefer straight quotes — I think they only belong on typewriter output, not in proper books or ebooks.
There are also various typos — missing close quotes, that sort of thing.
I attatch the sample from Amazon, and a cleaned-up version of the sample, to show exactly what I mean. (I haven't done any editing on the sample — just tidied up the formatting and corrected any missing punctuation that I noticed in passing. Nor have I added a Table of Contents.)
A little more time spent on formatting and presenting the book will pay off in the end, I'm sure.
Quote:
Originally Posted by JamesACooke
That's the plot of "Rent A Family," a poignant comic work of fiction.
Check it out on Amazon Kindle.
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