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Old 01-27-2010, 04:49 PM   #95
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XENOLITH has just undergone a bit of an overhaul.

I re-read it throughly a couple of weekends ago and discovered to my dismay a disturbing number of awkward phrases, unclear passages, inconsistent facts and unforgivable omissions of characters' feelings.

About a hundred of these foibles are fixed now. It won't look much different to the casual observer, the story is exactly the same, but I sure feel a lot better about the content now.

Still free, and will remain so until I get the sequel done.
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