Thread: CAVITY - help/advice appreciated
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Old 11-16-2009, 04:29 AM   #2
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Enclosed is the first chapter of my novella which has the working title, Cavity. I haven't written for the last 10 years so feeling pretty rusty. Any help/advice/feedback will be greatly appreciated. Even if you think it's terrible, I'd still rather know so I can improve.
If that's what you produced after 10 years of not-writing, God help the rest of us I loved it, evocative and well paced, it did everything I could have asked for in an opening sequence. Keep it up.
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