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Kate, I also want to say, great start! I agree with the (coffee and cream) comments.... that comment in () made me do a full stop in my reading and go back to reread.. It just seemed to be a discordant note in the beginning, but I'm not the author and I'll wait to see what you have in mind for its use.
I didn't mind the flashback at that point in the story, as I feel it is a normal thing many people do. I think a strong emotion can be triggered by something you see, do, or hear, and you naturally think back to what caused the strong emotion...
I'll look forward to reading more...
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