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Blogging your novel
Kate,
I have just read your opening and I think it works very well. My only specific suggestions would be to drop the parenthetical "coffee and cream" in favor of a smoother description that doesn't require the pause of parentheses and perhaps during the rather extended stretch of dialogue you could include just what Marguerite is doing as she prepares to sketch and then executes the sketch.
Overall I'm not sure how much you need or want the backstory overtones at this point. Finding out about things like Marguerite's lover's assessment of her soul might be better left to later in the story.
Good luck with your blog as you write project. I've been doing much the same over at Wordpress with my work in progress The Baer Boys. Although I'm not so much looking for critiques as simply hoping to keep myself moving ahead by putting the project out in public. Or as public as an infrequently visited blog like mine can be!
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