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Old 11-04-2009, 12:17 AM   #2
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Hi Kate

I only found one thing I would correct:

A girl she would never see again, nor wished to into

A girl she would never see again, nor did she wish to or

A girl she never saw again, nor wished to

I would also put "" around where M thinks to herself.

I enjoyed reading the first part... Looking forward to the next..
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