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Originally Posted by Sparrow
They both seem pretty iffy to me. 
The first trying too hard. The second too trite.
But then most initial paragraphs of most novels are fairly unpromising imho. |
Iffy!!! Iffy!*?! That's the first line from Fahrenheit 451. in a single sentence he encapsulates the motivation of a whole character, a flow for a novel and does it while drawing you into the story. Iffy!!!!???? As far as first lines go that's up there with "Call me ishmael" for brilliance.
Iffy?!!!??