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Originally Posted by Reyben
Good Lord, Nomesque, do you kiss your mother with that mouth?
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My mother said something similar
But there isn't anywhere near as much swearing in most of my stories. This one just happened to have potty-mouths as the main characters. I thought about trying to tone it down, but either it'd read weirdly (how many girlfriend-killing ex-cons say 'darn' and 'flip'?) or the asterisks would get distracting...
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Originally Posted by Reyben
...I thought the story was very good. Short, sharp, to the point. Decent, human-feeling characters (although Geordie fell a little flat for me) and good emotional interplay. Didn't quite see the resolution coming. Also, I really like any story that uses multiple first person perspectives. Oh, and the double-take with the plants was hilarious.
Overall, very entertaining. Well done.
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Thanks!
Yeah, Geordie's a little stereotypical, and now I think about it, he's the only character who didn't get time in the limelight. No Geordie-perspectives whatsoever. Hrmmm.
I do find it interesting that some people like the multi-first-person format, some hate it, and some are just... OK with it. It's not something I've really seen used much, but it just screamed to be used for this story.
I'm glad you found it entertaining. That was the primary motive for writing it - sheer entertainment value. And of course the moral lesson
