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Old 08-16-2009, 12:28 AM   #28
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I'm half-way through and noticed two things:
  1. For most of the story, there are no paragraph breaks (maybe <br> tags instead of <p> tags? Or just a bad Feedbooks conversion?)
  2. "Donny Marco" starts out as "Donny Franco".

I like the plucky canine Steinbeck and I spotted another Joni reference in the "Mermaid Cafe". Good story so far. Thanks!
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